Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The visiual plans a college cafe before it was redesigned and Today cafe.
Overall, The student plan to credit cafe. However, before redesign cafe is simple cafe because its is not redesign cafe compare to today cafe is more develpment cafe in today cafe have good serving and facility.Moverover, today cafe have good qulity of food.
On the one hand, In before redesign cafe is simple cafe is there are no more facility. However cafe degine is not bad. Morevoer, In this cafe have kitchen, serving area, toilets, table and chairs and mean thing is staff dining rooms.
On the other hand, Today cafe is more dovelopment cae
However, in this cafe have good serving and hot meals speacial food in thig cafe. there are more facility like Outdoor seating, Coffee bar, salad bar, take away food and big hall.Moreover, this cafe costumer give good feed back forexmple there are provide good service and food, this cafe is intresting and dovelopment cafe.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the changes shown in the two maps of the college cafe, but it falls well short of an adequate overview. The candidate mentions some changes, such as the addition of outdoor seating, a coffee bar, a salad bar, and a barbecue, which are accurate observations from the visual data. However, the explanation is heavily obscured by unclear phrasing, speculation about customer feedback ('costumer give good feed back'), and repetitive language. The overall description fails to clearly contrast the structural layouts or comprehensively report the main features as required in an Academic Task 1 response. Consequently, this performance aligns with the Band 4 descriptors, as the response is basic, touches upon elements of the task minimally, and contains significant irrelevancies.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organization of the text is weak. Although the student attempts to use transition signals such as 'Overall', 'On the one hand', and 'On the other hand', their application is mechanically forced and frequently inaccurate given the context of a map comparison. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical progression of ideas is very difficult to follow. Sentences often lack coherent connections, and referencing is poor, making it hard for the reader to track whether the text refers to the past layout or current layout. The overall arrangement fails to achieve a clear, logical progression throughout, placing it firmly at Band 4.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical range is extremely limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling mistakes throughout the text (e.g., 'visiual', 'develpment', 'degine', 'qulity', 'speacial', 'thig', 'costumer', 'forexmple', 'intresting'). The student relies heavily on basic vocabulary and struggles to accurately apply topic-specific terms related to spatial descriptions or campus facilities. Attempts at less common vocabulary result in non-standard word forms and collocation errors, such as 'dovelopment cae'. This matches the Band 4 descriptor, where basic vocabulary is used with frequent errors that strain the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are heavily flawed. There is a persistent lack of control over basic verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure (e.g., 'In before redesign cafe is simple cafe is there are no more facility' and 'in this cafe have good serving'). Punctuation and word forms are erratic. Errors are frequent and severe enough to constantly distort meaning and impede communication, placing the grammar performance at a Band 4 level.
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