Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The plans illustrates a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now. It shows significant changes, particularly with the introduction of new food and dining facilities adds major importance to its layout. In addition, "Staff dining rooms" turns into "take away food and cofee bar". Now it looks stunning. Meanwhile, "Serving area" evolve into "Hot meals" because it has popularity through out the year. At Western side, construction of "Salad Bar" create a more enhancement. There is also a new added area at the outdoor , "barbecue and outdoor seating" make it more convenient and reliable. In the east, "bin" is replaced by "recycling bins" that are required according to the situations. Although "toilets" are roughly placed at the same place. In South west corner, "kitchen" is also having its on place with just minor changes. Now, the college cafe layout enumirates every location visible to the visitors and it is suficient to all members.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main changes shown in the two plans of the college cafe, noting key alterations such as the addition of the salad bar, outdoor seating, barbecue, and the conversion of staff dining rooms into a take-away food and coffee bar. However, the student includes personal commentary and unsupported speculations not present in the visual data, such as stating that the serving area evolved into hot meals because 'it has popularity through out the year' and that the layout 'makes it more convenient and reliable' and 'looks stunning'. Furthermore, there is no proper overview paragraph summarising the main general trends. Consequently, the task response is partially descriptive and partially speculative, corresponding to a Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text suffers from poor paragraphing, being written almost entirely as a single block or disjointed set of sentences without a clear structural progression. While some spatial links are attempted, such as 'At Western side', 'In the east', and 'In South west corner', the overall organisation is weak. Cohesive devices are frequently awkward or misused, and referencing is sometimes unclear, disrupting the logical flow of information between the original and redesigned layouts. This places the response firmly in the Band 5 category for cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with several noticeable lexical and spelling errors that impede communication. Examples include 'cofee' instead of coffee, 'enumirates' instead of enumerates, and 'suficient' instead of sufficient. The student also struggles with word choice and collocation, using phrases like 'adds major importance to its layout' and 'create a more enhancement'. There is an attempt to use less common vocabulary, but frequent inaccuracies mean the lexical control aligns with a Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The grammatical range is limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures alongside faulty attempts at complex forms. There are frequent grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the text. For instance, the opening sentence has a subject-verb agreement error ('The plans illustrates'), and other sentences lack proper clause structures or contain incorrect verb tenses, such as 'kitchen is also having its on place'. These persistent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5 descriptors.
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