Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The two plans illustrates the transformation of college cafe before it was redesigned and it's present structure.
Overall , the school cafe has undergone notable enhancement , including the expansion of serving area and staff dinning room and the introduction of new amenities while certain features remained unchanged.
According to the before cafe redesign plan , there is a few amenities availble such as bin situated in the east side and the besides of bin to the north-east there is a toilet which is place in the corner.In the center of this plan tables and chaies has intall .Infront of tables and chaies there is the big hall which is segmented into two square room where the staff went to eat their food .Similarly , in the west side there is the door if we walk to the right there is a serving area where we serve all food and drink and kitchen is connnected with it which occupied a quite space.
In the case of present cafe , there is a lots of changes we can notice such as serving area is expanded into hot meals ,staff dinning room converted into take away food abd coffe bar .Whereas there is a lots of new facilities intalled inclusing , salad bar , barbecue and lots of outdoor seating .While other amenities remained in the same place without any changes such as kitchen , recycle bin , toilet and tables and chairs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student addresses the task by comparing the two plans of the college cafe, covering key changes such as the conversion of the staff dining rooms into a take-away food and coffee bar area, the expansion of the serving area into hot meals, and the addition of outdoor seating, a barbecue, and a salad bar. An overview is attempted in the second paragraph, outlining the main modifications. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting; for instance, the student states that the 'staff dinning room' was expanded, when in fact those rooms were removed and replaced by new facilities. Additionally, the description relies heavily on unstructured narrative detail rather than clear, analytical grouping of information, which limits the development of the response. Task Achievement is rated at band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into logical paragraphs, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overview, a description of the past layout, and finally the current layout. However, overall progression is somewhat hindered by clunky transitions and repetitive sentence structures (e.g., beginning multiple sentences with 'In the case of...' or 'According to the...'). Cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, and referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'which occupied a quite space' referring back to the kitchen or serving area. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion requires better logical flow and linking phrases. Coherence and Cohesion is rated at band 5.5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to name various features from the plans like 'kitchen', 'salad bar', 'barbecue', and 'recycling bin'. However, there are frequent spelling errors ('illustrates' used with plural 'plans', 'availble', 'chaies', 'intall', 'Infront', 'abd', 'coffe', 'inclusing', 'recycle'), and word choice is often basic or repetitive. Attempts at less common vocabulary lead to awkward phrasing, such as 'present structure' or 'notable enhancement'. These lexical limitations and errors occasionally impede smooth reading. Lexical Resource is rated at band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but grammatical accuracy is weak. There are numerous basic errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The two plans illustrates', 'there is a few amenities availble', 'tables and chaies has intall'), article usage, and prepositions ('in the east side', 'to the north-east'). Complex structures are often faulty, and punctuation errors occur throughout the text, such as irregular spacing around commas and missing apostrophes ('it's' used for possessive). While meaning is generally conveyed despite the errors, the high frequency of grammatical mistakes keeps the score at band 5.0.
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