Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The map illustrats the cahanging thr college cafe before it was design and how you can se they looks now.

Overall,the cafe is significantly redesign other facillitis and the location of serving area with the todays cafe .

first change is the servind are is being shipted into the cornor of the old map to move in the bottom of the todays cafe,after that befoe the starff roam is the bottom of the old cape now that room were redesign is the is almost in the same place .

and the todays map they are servel changes is campare to the before caffe.now they were added diffrent type of facilites inclouding sakad bar and toiles are also redesign.tables and in chairs remain unchanged.babecue and outdoor seating area are aslo redesign in the todays cafe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response is under-length, containing only 134 words compared to the required minimum of 150 words, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. While the student attempts to summarise the main changes between the two plans—such as the repositioning of the serving area, the addition of a salad bar, and the introduction of outdoor seating—the descriptions are vague, fragmented, and contain several inaccurate statements. For example, the student claims the staff rooms remain almost in the same place, whereas the plan shows they have been replaced by a coffee bar and takeaway food section. Furthermore, the overview lacks clarity and fails to provide a fully developed summary of the key transformations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response is poorly organised, with arbitrary paragraph breaks and a lack of clear logical progression. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in disjointed sentences that are difficult to follow. For instance, transitional phrases like "first change is" and "and the todays map they are servel changes is campare" demonstrate a heavy reliance on mechanical and faulty linking structures. Paragraphing is ineffective, and the overall structure fails to guide the reader smoothly through the comparison of the two floor plans.

Lexical Resource: Band 3.5

The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and plagued by severe spelling errors throughout the text. Words are frequently misspelled beyond recognition, such as "illustrats", "cahanging", "servind", "shipted", "cornor", "starff", "cappe", "servel", "sakad", "toiles", and "babecue". The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for an Academic Task 1 response, failing to provide precise descriptions of spatial changes or architectural features.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 3.5

Grammatical control is extremely weak, with pervasive errors across all sentence structures. The response contains numerous fragmented or run-on sentences, such as "The map illustrats the cahanging thr college cafe before it was design and how you can se they looks now." Subject-verb agreement is frequently violated, verb tenses are confused, and prepositions are misused throughout. There are almost no error-free sentences, and the high frequency of grammatical mistakes significantly impedes communication.

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