Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Information regarding that the layout is presented in the map, which illustrates a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now .
Overall it is evident that cafe before redesign was not developed that cafe today . additionally, cafe today is much elegant in places are moved somecase there was changed than cafe before redesign.
Looking first at eastern site change the side of recycling bins its very elegant . In southern east there was not changed in toilet .Although there was outdoor seating had build in cafe today its can get rebuild mucg elegant to seat this palces in cafe .
turning the remaining site the northernwest side there was corner of the kitchen and serving area such as food and drink etc in cafe before redesighn amd changed the hotel meals was extend in size. In staff dinning rooms changed into the diffrent parts like coffee bar and take away in the caben there was tables and chairs to seat the costumers . in west there was build in the salad bar its was new looks today . In southern west there was also build in the outer side in the cafe there was barbeceu in the peoples . consequently cafe todays look was most elegant than cafe before redesigned .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The student attempts to address the task by comparing the two plans of the college cafe, noting changes such as the addition of the salad bar, outdoor seating, and barbecue, as well as modifications to the kitchen, staff dining rooms, and bins. However, the response lacks a clear, well-structured overview, and many details are described in a disjointed and imprecise manner. While the main features are touched upon, the lack of coherent grouping and development means the response falls into the lower-middle bands. Key spatial relationships are frequently unclear or incorrectly described, impacting the overall coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organizational structure of the response is weak. Although the writer attempts to use transitional phrases like 'Looking first at eastern site' and 'turning the remaining site', the paragraphs lack logical progression and internal cohesion. Sentences are frequently fragmented, and the referencing between ideas is muddled, making the overall arrangement difficult to follow. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of information is confused. Cohesive devices are often inadequate, inaccurate, or mechanical, which hinders the readability of the text.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and awkward phrasing such as 'much elegant', 'hotel meals', and 'caben'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items, and spelling errors ('redesighn', 'barbeceu', 'mucg') further limit the score. The range of vocabulary is barely adequate to communicate the basic features of the maps, resulting in noticeable strain for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple structures and faulty attempts at complex sentences. There are frequent, severe errors in tense usage, prepositional phrases, word order, and basic sentence construction (e.g., 'Information regarding that the layout is presented in the map', 'its can get rebuild mucg elegant'). Punctuation is also poorly handled, with missing capitals and run-on sentences. These pervasive errors frequently impede communication and cause difficulty for the reader.
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