Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The picture shows the changes in the cafe before and after renovate it.
To start with,in the northwest side there was in kitchen that is on same place now.on the downside of kitchen there was a serving area before that was removed and chnaged into hot meals area now.salad bar is build in westside that space was empty in past time in cafe.
Moreover, two staff dining rooms were replaced with take away food and coffee bar in today's cafe.tables and chairs and toilrts are on the exect place as before renovated the cafe but the size of recycling bins was increased in new design of cafe.however, outside of cafe new things are added in southwest side ,new barbecue is constructed and in the rest of area in front of cafe ,they set up tables and chairs as a outside seating in south side.
overall,in past time there was less facilties in cafe but after redevelopment they add some seating area and remove serving area also changed the size of some parts of cafe to make it more laxiures and becautiful.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by describing the main changes shown in the two maps of the college cafe. Key modifications are identified, such as the conversion of staff dining rooms into a take-away food area and coffee bar, the addition of a salad bar in the west, and the introduction of outdoor seating and a barbecue. However, the response suffers from several inaccuracies and omissions. For instance, the student claims that 'the size of recycling bins was increased', whereas the visual data shows that recycling bins replaced a standard bin in the same general area, and their relative size is not explicitly quantified as 'increased'. Furthermore, the overview lacks precision and includes subjective, informal commentary ('to make it more laxiures and becautiful'). Overall, the task is addressed only partially, as some features are under-developed or misread, placing this response at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which provides a basic structural framework, but overall progression and logical flow are weak. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively (e.g., starting sentences with 'To start with,in the northwest side...' and 'Moreover...'). Referencing is frequently unclear, and punctuation and spacing errors severely disrupt the flow of reading (e.g., missing spaces after commas and periods throughout the text, such as 'To start with,in the northwest side there was in kitchen'). Paragraphing is present, but the internal organization of ideas lacks clear signposting and smooth transitions. Due to these mechanical cohesion issues and a lack of clear overall progression, the response achieves a Band 5.0 for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with several spelling errors ('chnaged', 'toilrts', 'exect', 'laxiuers', 'becautiful', 'facilties'). There are also word-choice and grammatical collocation errors, such as 'before that was removed and chnaged into hot meals area now' and 'salad bar is build in westside'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'redevelopment' and 'barbecue', but the high frequency of spelling mistakes and awkward phrasing limits the lexical range. Because the vocabulary is limited and contains noticeable errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, it meets the criteria for Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex or compound sentences are frequently flawed by missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect prepositions, and severe punctuation errors (e.g., 'there was in kitchen that is on same place now' and 'in past time there was less facilties in cafe but after redevelopment they add some seating area'). Punctuation is largely neglected, with numerous run-on clauses and missing spaces after terminal punctuation marks. Frequent grammatical and structural errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader, warranting a band score of 4.0.
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