Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The plans beneth illustrate a college cafe then it was restruture and now it looks completely different.

Over all there have been many changes done in cafe let dicussed it below.

At first staff dining rooms have been close completely we can not see it new map instesd on that place meals take away has been place and there coffee bar right next to it , secondly tables and chairs have been on same place so there is no changes made there , at third we can see recycling bin was small in previous map, at present it is big,moreover there is a salad bar has been included now which was not available though. There have been some extra tables added outdoor and a palce for barbecue, coming back to table there are three big and two small table have added ,washroom is on the same place there is no cahnges in that, furthermore serveing are is replaced with hot meals at last, kitchen is on the same palce perhaps there is no cahnge it .

overall the new lace have better space and well orgaized

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the changes shown in the two maps, such as the addition of the salad bar, outdoor seating, barbecue, and the conversion of the staff dining rooms into a take-away food area and coffee bar. However, the structure of the essay is disorganized, making it difficult to fully grasp a coherent overview. While the student identifies multiple specific changes, the lack of an introductory overview and the rambling nature of the body paragraph prevent the score from reaching a higher band. It satisfies the basic requirements of summarising visual data, but the development and presentation of ideas remain limited.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response suffers from severe issues with cohesion and paragraphing. It consists of a single, poorly structured block of text following a weak introductory sentence, with a conversational and run-on style ('let dicussed it below', 'at first', 'at third'). Cohesive devices are either misused, inadequate, or entirely absent, leading to a lack of overall progression. Sentences are strung together with commas rather than proper punctuation or conjunctions, which disrupts the logical flow and makes it challenging for the reader to follow the spatial comparisons between the two plans.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms like 'place', 'map', and 'big'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'beneth' for beneath, 'restruture' for restructured, 'instesd' for instead, 'serveing' for serving, and 'orgaized' for organized. While the student attempts to name specific features from the diagram like 'salad bar' and 'coffee bar', the overall lexical range is narrow, and errors often cause strain for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There is a heavy reliance on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex constructions result in frequent run-on sentences and punctuation errors, such as comma splices ('tables and chairs have been on same place so there is no changes made there'). Errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and missing articles are pervasive (e.g., 'staff dining rooms have been close completely', 'there is a salad bar has been included now'). These persistent errors frequently impede communication.

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