Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given plan demonstrates that the look of kitchen before and after it was redesgined .In the plan that is given before the kitchen is redesigned .Kitchen is located on the top left corner of the of the cafe and it contains a service area that provides all kinds of food and drinks .The other are of the cafe is reserved for sitting .Toilet is located on the bottom right corner of the cafe .Doors are on the top right side of the cafe in front of door at a distance there is the dining area of staff .
After the cafe is redesgined the kitchen is right where it was but it will only serve hot meals.Salad counter is now located in the front of the kitchen door that is besides the counter of hot meals.The area that was reserved was dining of staff is now seperated and one part of it is reserved for take away food and other is for a coffee bar .Toilet is located at the same place in front of toilet theres a recycling bin .The other area still has table and chairs.Doors of cafe are on the top rightg as well as there is a door beside toilet and to the left of the salad counter .There is also a outdoor sitting area now with a barbecue stall.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the changes shown in the two maps of the college cafe. While the main features are touched upon, such as the relocation of the serving areas and the addition of the outdoor seating and barbecue, the overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the overall transformation. Furthermore, there are some inaccuracies in describing spatial relationships, such as the position of the salad counter and doors. The student attempts to compare the before and after states, but the development of ideas is limited by frequent descriptive inaccuracies and a lack of clear structuring. To improve, the writer should focus on identifying major overarching trends rather than listing minor details haphazardly.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response lacks a clear paragraph structure, presenting the description in dense blocks of text with run-on sentences. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate, leading to a disjointed reading experience. For example, transitions between the description of the old layout and the new layout are abrupt, with phrases like 'After the cafe is redesgined' used simply rather than woven into a cohesive comparative narrative. Referencing is occasionally confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the exact spatial progression across the maps. Proper paragraphing—separating the introduction, the old layout, and the new layout—would significantly enhance coherence.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms like 'cafe', 'kitchen', 'door', 'table', and 'chairs'. There are multiple spelling errors throughout the text, including 'redesgined', 'are', 'seperated', 'theres', and 'outdoor' (written as 'a outdoor'). Less common lexical items are attempted with low accuracy or unnatural collocation. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic subject matter, the frequency of errors in spelling and word choice restricts the score to the lower bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is quite limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that frequently contain structural errors. There are numerous punctuation and capitalization issues, such as missing spaces after periods and missing commas. Sentences often run together without proper conjunctions, as seen in 'The given plan demonstrates that the look of kitchen before and after it was redesgined .In the plan that is given before...'. Verb tense usage is inconsistent, switching awkwardly between past and present descriptions. Frequent basic errors impede smooth reading and demonstrate a weak control over complex grammatical structures.
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