Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given diagram provides information about college cafe before it was redesigned and how it look now.
In general,when the cafe was redesign at the rightside r there had serving area(all food and drink).But today at that place there hot meals it has changed.At the middle there was staff dining room.It had convert into take away food and coffee bar.At the down side there was nothing but now there is a saladbar.Today at the bottom side there had added barbecue and outdoor seating.Table and chairs were at the same place when it was redesign and now also it is at same place.
Firstly,when the cafe before redesign.At the top side there was kitchen and another besides down there had serving area.At the middle side there had staff dining rooms and table and chairs.At left side there was bin.At bottom there had a toilet.
Secondly cafe today,At the top there is kitchen and hot meals.At the middle there is a take away food,coffe bar and table and chairs.At the leftside there is recycling bins.At the right bottom there is saladbar.At the bottom there is Barbecue and outdoor seating.
Secondly cafe today,Kitchen and hot meals were at top.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The student attempts to describe the changes shown in the two maps of the college cafe, but the response suffers from major issues in spatial interpretation and accuracy. For example, the student states that 'at the right side there had serving area' and that the staff dining rooms were at the middle, which misrepresents the original layout. Furthermore, the description of the current layout contains numerous inaccuracies, such as placing the salad bar at the 'right bottom' (it is actually on the western wall) and misidentifying the positions of various features. Although there is an attempt at an overview in the first paragraph, the lack of accurate data reporting and the misreading of key spatial relationships mean the response falls below the requirements for higher bands.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The organization of the response is extremely fragmented and lacks a logical progression. The essay is broken down into very short, disjointed fragments and repetitive bullet-like sections, such as 'Firstly, when the cafe before redesign' and 'Secondly cafe today', followed by another redundant sentence attempting the same introduction. Paragraphing is not used effectively; instead, sentences are broken into isolated lines without proper transitions or cohesive devices. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships between the various changes on the plans.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. The student relies heavily on simple functional words and basic spatial terms such as 'top side', 'middle', 'bottom side', and 'left side'. There are repeated instances of incorrect lexical choices and awkward phrasing, such as 'when the cafe was redesign at the rightside r there had serving area' and 'It had convert into take away food'. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for discussing visual data effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple sentences with frequent structural errors. There are persistent errors in verb tenses and voice, such as 'how it look now', 'the cafe was redesign', 'there had serving area', and 'it had convert'. Punctuation is also poorly handled, with missing spaces and comma splices throughout the text. Complex sentence structures are largely absent, and the high frequency of basic errors significantly impairs communication.
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