Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The diagram illustrates the college cafe was reconstruction before and after pictures and how it looks like.
Overall, it is evident that college cafe change a lot of things. Its can be clearly seen that there are some changes in new designs. For example, add slaad bar, outdoor seating and side kitchen and serving areas all food and drinks.In the east side there are bins and toilet.the centre of the college Cafe staff dining room and large tables and chairs areas.All the things is old college cafe.
On the other hand,it can be seen clearly that, redesign the college cafe there are alot of things new.The first one is kitchen and hot meals in north side of cafe.In addition,in the mid of the college cafe table and chairs remain unchanged but staff dining room inverted to take waya food and coffee Furthermore, recycling big and toilet some samll changing.The majar changes is south side thee are outdoor seating and barbeque facility available which is the big changes in new design colleges cafe.Final nadast changes in east side of college cafe is salad bar in mind of the Cafe.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to describe the changes shown in the college cafe plans, noting several key features such as the addition of the salad bar, outdoor seating, and the barbecue area, alongside alterations to the kitchen and dining spaces. However, the task achievement is significantly hindered by unclear descriptions, numerous inaccuracies regarding spatial locations (e.g., placing the salad bar on the east side when it is on the west), and poorly developed comparisons. The overview is weak and fails to effectively synthesise the main overall changes. These limitations place the response at Band 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The essay lacks clear overall progression and logical paragraphing. While the writer attempts to contrast the 'before' and 'after' states using basic transitional markers like 'On the other hand', the internal structure of the paragraphs is disjointed and confusing. Sentences frequently lack cohesive ties, and referencing is often ambiguous or absent, making it difficult to follow the progression of spatial information. Punctuation and spacing errors (e.g., missing spaces after periods) further disrupt the flow of the text. Overall organisation aligns with Band 4.5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on simple terms such as 'big changes', 'things', and 'side'. There are numerous word choice errors and incorrect derivations, such as 'reconstruction before and after pictures', 'slaad bar', and 'take waya food'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are largely unsuccessful due to severe spelling mistakes and incorrect collocation. The limited range of vocabulary and frequent errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting predominantly of simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent, heavy grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and severe sentence fragmentations (e.g., 'For example, add slaad bar, outdoor seating and side kitchen and serving areas all food and drinks.'). Punctuation is also poorly controlled, with run-on sentences and spacing issues. These persistent and frequent errors significantly distort meaning, aligning with Band 4.0.
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