Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
It is a kitchen and that picture show its different areas and its task .
From before to now there are many new features build about this kitchen.
Firstly ,where is kitchen now there is also kitchen but where serving area all food &drink to date this area look like a hot meals this is a big changing.
Secondly, we go to the main hall where before staff dining area and a side a bin and infront of staff dining area toilets available and left all area of hall depend on tables and chairs,but now on the place of staff dining rooms a take away room and a coffee bar and a side a recycling bin and its opposite side a salad bar available and where toilets available today they also available.
Thirdly, before at open area no task perform but now at open area a side available where barbecue place and infront of this seating area available depend on four and six chair tables.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to describe the changes to the college cafe, identifying several key alterations such as the conversion of the staff dining rooms into a take-away food area and coffee bar, the addition of a salad bar, and the introduction of outdoor seating and a barbecue. However, the information is presented in a very basic and disjointed manner. The overview is weak, failing to clearly capture the overall transformation of the building. Furthermore, the description of locations is often imprecise and difficult to follow, such as 'where is kitchen now there is also kitchen'. The response covers the main areas but lacks the clear selection and reporting of main features required for a higher band, resulting in a score of 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response attempts to use sequencing devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Thirdly', but the overall organization and progression are weak. The paragraphs are poorly structured, consisting of lengthy, run-on sentences that make it difficult to follow the spatial relationships between the various areas of the cafe. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and inaccurately (e.g., 'and a side a bin and infront of staff dining area toilets available'), leading to repetitive patterns and unclear referencing. There is a lack of smooth transitions between ideas, causing the text to feel disjointed and impeding the flow of information.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on words lifted directly from the prompt or visual data (e.g., 'kitchen', 'serving area', 'tables and chairs', 'toilets'). There are numerous lexical inaccuracies and awkward phrasings, such as 'big changing' instead of 'major change' or 'transformation', and 'open area' instead of 'outdoor area'. Less common vocabulary is virtually absent, and the restricted range limits the precision with which the visual information can be communicated. Spelling and word choice errors frequently strain the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and heavily flawed complex or compound sentence structures. There is a persistent lack of basic subject-verb agreement and missing auxiliary verbs (e.g., 'that picture show', 'there are many new features build', 'where toilets available today they also available'). Punctuation is largely neglected or misused, resulting in long, run-on sentences with comma splices. Errors are frequent across the text and frequently impede communication, requiring the reader to re-read sentences to grasp the intended meaning.
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