Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given flow chart illustrates the design of cafe before and after remodeling.From the chart it can be seen that the cafe has changed a lot and more bars are added after the revamping.
The provided chart shows that before redesigning after entering the main gate the cafe use to have sitting area and staff dining rooms and on the left side was toilets and than on the top right side along the staff dining area was serving area and the kitchen. On the other hand, after remolding sitting area remain same while staff dining rooms were replaced with food take away and coffe bar and infront of siiting area was made salad bar and serving area was replaced with hot meals. Moreover, outdoor sitting and barbecue was also added. Furthermore, toilets and bins were remain at the same place.
In summary, before and after remodeling alot of cahnges has made with addition of barbecue,salad bar,coffe bar and take away.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to summarise the information from the plans, identifying key alterations such as the addition of the outdoor seating, barbecue, salad bar, and the replacement of staff dining rooms with a coffee bar and take-away area. However, there are notable spatial inaccuracies and confusion in the description, such as mislocating the toilets and general layout features. The overview is very basic, stating simply that the cafe changed a lot. While main features are touched upon, the lack of precision and somewhat disorganised reporting place this response at Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text suffers from poor paragraphing and extremely long, run-on sentences that lack appropriate punctuation. For instance, the second paragraph consists of two massive sentences connected by repetitive use of 'and' and 'then'. Cohesive devices are minimal, mechanical, and poorly controlled. There is no clear logical progression guiding the reader smoothly through the spatial changes between the 'before' and 'after' layouts, resulting in a confusing overall arrangement that corresponds to Band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'cafe', 'room', 'area', 'changed', and 'added'. There are several spelling and word-form errors throughout the text, such as 'flow chart' instead of 'plans' or 'diagram', 'remodeling' spelled as 'remolding', 'coffe bar', 'siiting', and 'cahnges'. While the writer attempts some topic-specific vocabulary (e.g., 'barbecue', 'salad bar', 'take away'), the restricted range and frequent lexical inaccuracies reflect Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The grammar is characterised by a lack of basic punctuation, run-on structures, and frequent structural errors. Sentences are excessively long and chained together with conjunctions rather than being broken down logically. There are notable tense inconsistencies and missing articles (e.g., 'the cafe use to have sitting area', 'was made salad bar', 'bins were remain'). Simple sentence forms are flawed, and attempts at complex or compound structures lack control and punctuation. This aligns with Band 5.
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