Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The rendered progress depict the given information about the college cafe redesigned early and it looks at present.
Overall, the area become more developed, with several new facilities added or replacing in the manufacture of cafe.
In detail, before the redesignation of cafe kitchen was located in the top northern side in the corner. Serving area was also built in the side of the corner where all food and drinks were available. Following this, staff dining rooms were manufactured near the sereving area of the cafe.The bin and toilets were located in the east side of the cafe. Meanwhile, tables and chairs placed on the centre of the cafe.
In case of today redesign of cafe, there has been many changes in after development. The serving area is replaced with hot meals and dining rooms has been converted into take away food and coffee bar. In contrast, after planned many things have been added like outdoor seatings, barbecue and salad bar.The kitchen recyclimg bins, toilets and tables and chairs remains unchanged in our place in cafe.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers all key parts of the visual data by outlining the main features of the college cafe before and after the redesign, including the kitchen, serving/hot meal areas, seating, and new additions like the salad bar and outdoor seating. However, some descriptions are vague or awkward, such as stating the area 'become more developed'. The overview is somewhat weak, but the comparison between the two plans is generally clear. It fits the Band 6 descriptor well as it addresses all parts of the prompt, though some developments and comparisons could be more precise and fully extended.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The text is organized into clear paragraphs, starting with an introduction and overview, moving into the past layout, and concluding with the current layout. However, logical progression is occasionally hindered by awkward transitions and repetitive sentence structures, such as starting multiple sentences with 'In detail' or 'In case of today redesign'. Cohesive devices are used, but sometimes mechanically ('Following this', 'In contrast'). Referencing is mostly clear, but overall paragraphing and cohesion place this firmly at a Band 6 level due to the somewhat disjointed flow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, attempting some less common words and phrases like 'redesignation' and 'recyclimg'. However, there are notable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'manufacture of cafe', 'staff dining rooms were manufactured', and spelling mistakes like 'recyclimg' and 'seatings'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, and these errors occasionally detract from precision, aligning the response with Band 5.5 to 6.0. A score of 6.0 is given as communication is generally not impeded.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is inconsistent. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the area become', 'tables and chairs placed') and preposition errors ('in the top northern side', 'in after development'). Punctuation and article usage also show frequent lapses. While these errors do not completely block understanding, they occur with high enough frequency to prevent the essay from reaching Band 6.5, making Band 6.0 an appropriate reflection of its current state.
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