Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The plans illustrate several new changing in the a college cafe and also compare old and new college cafe building.
Overall, it is clear that in south side build a outdoor seating area behind the toilets in the new design. While, the second main changing is that renames the rooms and change the rooms lociation.
At present, in the northwest side, where locate a serving area(all food & drink) opposite the kitchen replace by a hot meals room. Moreover, staff dining rooms convert into two different rooms that's take aways food and coffee bar.
On the hand other, there are added two rooms and a outdoor seating area, add a salad bar west inside in the caffe buildind, in addition, make a barbecue area behind the college cafe building and also add tables and chairs in the outdoor seating in fornt of barbecue side. At last change is that build two different exit and entering door near the outdoor seating area.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The candidate attempts to cover the main features of the two maps, noting changes such as the addition of the outdoor seating area, the salad bar, the barbecue, and the conversion of staff dining rooms. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and vague descriptions regarding locations. For instance, stating that the outdoor seating is 'behind the toilets' is incorrect (it is on the southern wall outside), and the overview provided in the introduction is awkwardly phrased and lacks clarity. Furthermore, some key details are missed or confused, placing the submission firmly at Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are weak. Transitional phrases like 'On the hand other' and 'At last change is that' are misused or unnatural. Referencing between sentences is often unclear, making it difficult to follow the spatial relationships described in the plans. While there is a basic attempt to structure an introduction, body, and conclusion-like final sentence, the cohesive devices are frequently inaccurate or inadequate, aligning with Band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very limited and repetitive, with frequent word-formation and collocation errors (e.g., 'new changing', 'build a outdoor seating area', 'take aways food', 'caffe buildind', 'in fornt of'). The candidate attempts some less common terms like 'convert' and 'barbecue', but the execution is marred by basic errors that impede smooth reading and cause strain for the reader. This corresponds to a Band 5 level of lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The grammatical structures are severely limited and prone to frequent error. The response contains numerous major errors in verb tense, voice, and sentence construction, such as 'where locate a serving area... replace by a hot meals room', 'staff dining rooms convert into', and 'make a barbecue area'. Simple sentences are often ungrammatical, and attempts at complex clauses break down entirely due to missing subjects or incorrect prepositions. These pervasive errors place the text at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 for overall comprehensibility.
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