Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided map diagram gives information on the difference of a college cafe when it was manufactured and how it looks now. Looking from an overall perspective it is evident that, it is much developed by by various changes. However, it also provides a lot facilities as compare to the past.

To commence with, the building design and same slots remained similar, which was constructed before its redesigning. One noticeable improvement is outdoor seating, which was not available before its redesigning. A significant development is the addition of barbecue at the bottom left. Although the kitchen remained same on similar location at top left, serving area for all kind of food and drinks is converted into hot meals.

On the other hand, whereas tables and chairs facilities remain same, one change has been the introduction of saladed bar. An interesting development is the replaced of staff dining rooms into take away food and coffee bar. while toilets remained same, bin is expanded by recycling bins.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the two plans and makes relevant comparisons, such as the addition of outdoor seating, a barbecue, a salad bar, and changes to the serving and dining areas. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting specific locations, such as stating that the barbecue is at the bottom left when the visual data places it to the south-west outside the building. The overview is somewhat weak, as phrasing like 'when it was manufactured' is inappropriate for a building redesign. Overall, it addresses the requirements of the task adequately, but a sharper focus and greater precision in reporting spatial details would elevate the score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, beginning with an introduction and overview, followed by body paragraphs detailing the changes. Cohesive devices are used to guide the reader, such as 'To commence with' and 'On the other hand'. However, referencing and cohesion are occasionally clumsy, and the sequencing within paragraphs lacks smooth transitions. Paragraphing is present, but the overall progression feels somewhat mechanical due to repetitive sentence openers and phrasing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with attempts at less common items such as 'redesigned', 'improvement', and 'introduction'. However, there are notable inappropriate word choices and collocations, such as 'when it was manufactured' instead of 'before it was redesigned', and 'saladed bar' instead of 'salad bar'. Repetition of phrases like 'before its redesigning' also limits the lexical range. Errors do not completely impede communication, but they highlight a lack of precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'Looking from an overall perspective it is evident that...' and 'Although the kitchen remained same on similar location...'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('a lot facilities', 'at top left'), incorrect prepositions ('on similar location'), and minor structural awkwardness ('as compare to the past', 'the replaced of staff dining rooms'). While these errors do not prevent the overall message from being understood, they restrict the response to a Band 5.5.

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