Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram illustrates the information about the previous structure of a college cafe and the structure after renovation.
Overview, several alterations take place in the modernisaion of the college cafe where salad bar is added and many other things remained same in the sturcture.
After analysing, it can be clearly seen that in the south-west direction barbecue space is consturcted along with the outdoor seating area in the south direction. A salad bar is installed in west direction of the cafe, whereas tables and chairs remained same in both designs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The student attempts to summarise the main features of the two plans, noting the addition of the salad bar, barbecue area, and outdoor seating. However, the response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 90 words. Furthermore, key features such as the changes to the staff dining rooms (converted into a takeaway food area and coffee bar) and the relocation of the bin to recycling bins are omitted. Due to the severe under-length and lack of full feature coverage, this criterion is limited.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into three very brief paragraphs, including a short introductory sentence and an overview attempt. However, the progression is weak due to the limited content. Cohesive devices are minimal, with phrases like 'After analysing' and 'whereas' used rather mechanically. Paragraphing is present, but the overall structural development is hindered by the brevity of the response.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate vocabulary for describing a map, such as 'modernisation', 'constructed', and 'installed'. However, there are noticeable spelling errors ('modernisaion', 'sturcture', 'consturcted') and some awkward phrasing like 'many other things remained same'. The lexical range is limited and repetitive, which restricts the score for this criterion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'it can be clearly seen that in the south-west direction barbecue space is consturcted along with the outdoor seating area'. There are several grammatical inaccuracies and missing articles, including 'Overview, several alterations take place' and 'salad bar is added'. Frequent minor errors persist, though they do not entirely obscure the meaning.
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