Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The plane illustrates redesigned colleg cafe and also show the old designed of caffe.

It cane be clearley seen that, the cafe before redesignrd in south east of cafe has a toilet and bin.Bside that in notrh west has a kitchen and service area.Further, in noth their has staff dinnig room. In aadition south side has sapace for tabile and chairs.Addmore in east side has bin.

Probing ahead, after redegined the cafe has a severl changes, in west there has salad bar.Although in north staff dinning room changed into take away food and coffee.Further in southwest there has barbecue.Beside in northwest serving area changed into hote meal.more increase size of recycling bin . in adadition,placed seats outside side from the cafe.

To sumup,there has lote of changes and build deferent typrs of thigegs also replace some olde thing with new things. However, changed over all degined also increas the size of some things

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the task by describing some changes between the two plans, such as the addition of the salad bar, outdoor seating, and the barbecue, as well as the replacement of staff dining rooms. However, the response suffers from severe mechanical transcription errors and a lack of clear overview or logical selection of main features. Many descriptions are vague or inaccurate due to poor expression (e.g., 'increase size of recycling bin'). While some key transformations are mentioned, the information is presented in a fragmented manner without adequate support or comparison, placing it firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 for partially addressing the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response is divided into three brief paragraphs, which superficially follows a structure. However, there is no clear overall progression, and the logical flow is heavily disrupted by pervasive linguistic errors. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused (e.g., 'Probing ahead', 'Addmore', 'To sumup'). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal coherence within the paragraphs is weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships between the old and new layouts. This aligns with the Band 4 descriptor.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Lexical range is extremely limited and repetitive. Basic vocabulary is used incorrectly or misspelled throughout the response (e.g., 'plane' for plan, 'colleg' for college, 'caffe', 'redesignedrd', 'sevrled', 'hote meal'). There is very little control over word formation or spelling, and numerous non-standard lexical items appear. While a few topic-specific words are attempted ('salad bar', 'barbecue', 'recycling bin'), the sheer volume of severe spelling and word-choice errors severely strains the reader and impedes communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak. There is a complete lack of error-free sentences, and almost every sentence contains fundamental errors in word order, verb forms, prepositions, and sentence structure (e.g., 'It cane be clearley seen that, the cafe before redesignrd in south east of cafe has a toilet and bin'). Simple structures are poorly handled, and attempts at complex sentences result in severe breakdown of meaning. Punctuation is also erratic. This demonstrates a level below Band 5.

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