Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The plans demostrate a previous and modern looking of the college cafeteria after the renovation process.
Overall the significant changes can be seen in the present also the area of the cafe increased with comparing of before state. Moreover, new stations like barbecue, salad bar and coffe bar can be seen today.
To begining with kitchen area it is same as previous but serving area changed to the hot meal area after the redesigning process. Morover, the two staff dining area constructed to new coffe bar and take away food corner. At the left corner of the dining area, newly designed salad bar can be shown as well as opposite to the salad bar at the right corner there is a recycling bin compared with previous.
The tables and chairs are located in the center area and toilets are in down corner of the cafe which may ot changed. There is a outside dining area can be seen today premises, which contains barbecue spot with outdoor seating area.
In contrast, the redesigning of the caetaria looks great and have more vacilities with comertable zone compared to previous.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response successfully covers all the key features of the two diagrams. You have noted the retention of the kitchen and toilets, the conversion of the staff dining rooms into a take-away food area and coffee bar, the addition of the salad bar, recycling bins, outdoor seating area, and barbecue spot. An overview is attempted in the second paragraph, capturing general changes such as increased area and new facilities. However, the overview is slightly simplistic and lacks precision. While all parts of the prompt are addressed, some descriptions are brief, which places this performance in the Band 6 range.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is arranged coherently with an introduction, body paragraphs detailing specific changes, and a concluding summary. Paragraphing is attempted, although the structure could be improved for smoother transitions between spatial features. Cohesive devices are used, but some phrases like 'To begining with' and 'Morover' are mechanically applied or contain spelling errors. Referencing between locations ('opposite to the salad bar at the right corner') is generally understandable but occasionally awkward. Progression is present, moving logically from interior changes to exterior additions.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, with domain-specific terms such as 'cafeteria', 'renovation process', 'salad bar', and 'recycling bin' correctly employed. However, there are notable word choice and spelling inaccuracies, such as 'demostrate' (demonstrate), 'looking' (look/appearance), 'coffe' (coffee), and 'comertable' (comfortable). Attempts to use less common vocabulary result in errors that occasionally draw attention, though they do not impede overall communication. A Band 6 reflects this mix of adequate terms and persistent lexical slips.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'Moreover, new stations like barbecue, salad bar and coffe bar can be seen today.' However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors including missing prepositions, incorrect verb forms ('may ot changed' instead of 'may not have changed'), and spelling errors in inflections ('demostrate', 'To begining with'). Punctuation is also sparse, particularly regarding comma splices and missing commas after introductory transitional phrases. The majority of sentences contain errors, limiting the score to Band 5.
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