Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The maps compare the college cafe in the past and present that was reconstruted with new feactures and facilities.Before the college cafe had dining rooms and after renovation cafe were outdoor seating and also variety of food.
Firstly, the main change was their menu, today in which cafe have barbecue facility and salad bar, that was not available before. in present they were provided hot meals and provide take away services.
in addtion college cafe had staff dining rooms are replace by a hug coffee bar that was a major change after renovation.that time college had just bin and in present they have a lot of bins for students.
therefore,food siting are divided salad bar and coffe section had also sitting with table chairs and the other barbecue had also their outdoor siting.
overall,the main difference in college cafe had after renovation was their seating before they have just indoor sitting with limited seats and in present they have indoor sitting like tables chairs and outdoor both facilities with huge space.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response attempts to cover the main features of the two plans, noting key changes such as the addition of a barbecue, salad bar, outdoor seating, and the replacement of staff dining rooms with a coffee bar and take-away area. However, there are notable limitations. The overview lacks clarity and precision, and some details are imprecise or awkwardly phrased (e.g., 'college cafe had dining rooms and after renovation cafe were outdoor seating'). The selection of features is somewhat incomplete, and the development of ideas remains quite basic. It addresses the task adequately to earn a band 5.5, but falls short of band 6.0 due to underdeveloped comparisons and frequent structural imprecision in reporting data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text attempts a logical division of paragraphs, separating the introduction, menu changes, facility changes, and overall summary. However, the organisation is undermined by awkward linking phrases and poor cohesion. For example, paragraphs begin with abrupt transitions like 'Firstly, the main change was their menu, today in which cafe have...' and 'in addtion college cafe had staff dining rooms...'. Furthermore, referencing is frequently unclear, and punctuation or capitalisation errors (e.g., lowercase letters at the start of sentences like 'in present they were provided') disrupt the flow. Overall, the arrangement shows some rudimentary organisation, but cohesive devices are inaccurate and mechanical, placing it firmly at band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms such as 'cafe', 'changes', 'food', and 'seating'. There are noticeable lexical and spelling errors throughout, including 'reconstruted' for reconstructed, 'feactures' for features, 'addtion' for addition, and 'coffe' for coffee. The student attempts to use some less common items like 'barbecue facility', 'salad bar', and 'outdoor seating', but word choice and collocation are often strained (e.g., 'food siting are divided salad bar and coffe section had also sitting'). The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for the task, resulting in a band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, with frequent errors in basic sentence construction, tense consistency, and prepositions. Sentences often lack proper grammatical scaffolding, leading to severe awkwardness, such as 'today in which cafe have barbecue facility and salad bar, that was not available before. in present they were provided hot meals and provide take away services.' Subject-verb agreement issues and tense confusion (mixing past and present haphazardly) are widespread. Because errors occur constantly and frequently cause difficulty or strain for the reader, the grammar performance aligns with a band 4.0.
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