Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given plans demonstrate show a collage before redesigned and how often looks after construction.
According to given information, there is a large rectangular size area where staff dining rooms in the middle of the area and below this section tables and chairs are setting here and toilets are showing their positions in the south-west of the cafe. In the cafe before redesign there infrastructure serving area for all sort of drinks and foods are up-down next to the kitchen area where in this section kitchen hold a top-bottom area of the north-east side area of the cafe.
After the cafe infrastructure development, all the areas holds specfic sities and many other additional areas constructed in the cafe redesignation.In this section kitchen holds the same position as it as, while hot meals were added to this area below the kitchen section. Takle away food section and cofee bar are installed in the center of the cafe area. Recycling bins and salad bar was adding to this new construction.Tables and chairs was seating in the middle of the cafe but toilets holds the same position.Barbecue and outdoor seating area was installed first time in the cafe's construction.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The student attempts to describe the main features of the college cafe before and after the redesign, mentioning the kitchen, seating areas, toilets, and newly added features such as the outdoor seating, barbecue, and salad bar. However, there are significant inaccuracies in spatial referencing and descriptions of the layouts. For instance, the staff dining rooms were located along the north wall, but the student misplaces them in the middle, and the overall description is muddled and difficult to follow. While the response touches on the main changes, the lack of clarity and precision in reporting the visual data prevents it from achieving a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response is divided into a short introduction and two body paragraphs, but the overall progression of ideas is disjointed and confusing. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'According to given information' and 'After the cafe infrastructure development'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard to follow which part of the plan is being described. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within sentences and between clauses is weak, leading to an erratic flow that significantly impedes readability.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The lexical range is quite limited and heavily repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and awkward collocations. Examples include 'collage' instead of college, 'redesignation' instead of redesign, and 'specfic sities' instead of specific sites. Words are often misused, such as 'infrastructure development' and 'holding positions'. Spelling mistakes are numerous (e.g., 'cofee', 'Takle'). The vocabulary is barely adequate to communicate simple ideas about the diagram, placing it firmly in the lower bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control of grammar is very weak. There are frequent, intrusive errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and word order, such as 'demonstrate show a collage before redesigned', 'tables and chairs are setting here', and 'Recycling bins and salad bar was adding'. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and missing commas. These errors frequently impede communication and cause difficulty for the reader.
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