Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The blueprint illustrates the college cafe showing how it looks before and after redesigning.
Overall, before remodelling the cafe there were serving area included for all food and drinks and there are staff dining rooms too, whereas after remodelling the cafe there were hot meals and also a new salad bar in the cafe.Most importantly, after remodelling there were barbecue in the cafe with outdoor seating.
Before remodelling the college cafe, A kitchen is included by serving all food and drinks to the students.Tables and chairs are present in the hall of the cafe for seating purpose including dining rooms for staffs.At the right side corner toilets are situated in the cafe.
After remodelling the cafe, there were some slight changes in the cafe.Barbecue is introduced to the students with outdoor seating.In the kitchen, hot meals are provided to the students.Take away food also availabe in the cafe including a coffee bar at the right side.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by comparing the two plans of the college cafe. Key features such as the kitchen, outdoor seating, and the barbecue area are mentioned. However, the response lacks a clear and complete overview of the main changes, and several details are underdeveloped or inaccurate. For instance, the student states that 'staff dining rooms' were present before remodelling, but misses describing how they were replaced by a take-away food counter and coffee bar in the redesigned plan. Furthermore, the description remains too brief, failing to fully report all major spatial shifts. This aligns with a Band 5 performance.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into short paragraphs representing an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs for 'before' and 'after'. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of smooth transitions. Cohesive devices are minimal or misused (e.g., repeating 'before remodelling' and 'after remodelling' awkwardly at the start of sentences). Paragraphing is attempted, but the structural organisation lacks overall flow and sophistication, placing it at a Band 5 level.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive ('remodelling', 'cafe', 'students'). There are noticeable word choice and collocation issues, such as 'serving area included for all food and drinks' and 'Take away food also availabe in the cafe including a coffee bar'. Less common lexical items are attempted but often inaccurate or unnatural. Spelling errors also occur, such as 'availabe'. This corresponds to Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in tense usage, subject-verb agreement, and articles (e.g., 'there were barbecue in the cafe', 'A kitchen is included by serving', 'staffs' instead of 'staff'). These errors occasionally cause confusion or difficulty for the reader. The grammatical range is limited, matching the descriptors for Band 5.
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