Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
the cafe before redesign was a lilttle bit not good looking ,the tables and chairs were taking a lot of space however there was no any space for a café or salad bar .morever the restaurent doesnt offere no area to take your food away .in addition, the staff dining rooms were taking a huge place in the café,therefore the the serving area were limited like you can take both food and drink same time in the same place,however the redesigned café is more confortable where you can find outdoor seating seat and a barbecue but inside there is a salad bar where you can take your salad from it and about the toilets nothing change. although, the coffe bar exist now with a take away food and the bins now can be recycled in conclution the redesign café will make them a lot of finance profit because of this changes
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the two plans, noting changes such as the addition of the salad bar, outdoor seating, barbecue, and coffee bar. However, the report lacks an appropriate academic tone and format, being written as a single dense paragraph with informal phrasing like 'a lilttle bit not good looking'. Furthermore, several key features are described vaguely or inaccurately, and the overview is absent. The student touches upon various modifications, but the overall development falls short of higher band requirements. This corresponds to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The entire response is written as one single, long paragraph without any logical division or paragraphing. Cohesive devices are either misused or overused, such as repeating 'however' and 'in addition' awkwardly. There is no clear progression of ideas, and referencing is often unclear (e.g., 'the bins now can be recycled'). The lack of proper structuring and chaotic flow severely impacts the readability and logical organisation of the text. This aligns with Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with noticeable spelling and word choice errors (e.g., 'lilttle', 'restaurent', 'offere', 'confertable', 'coffe', 'conclution'). There is an inability to use less common lexical items accurately, and colloquial expressions like 'a lilttle bit not good looking' are unsuitable for an Academic Task 1 response. Communication is strained due to these persistent lexical inadequacies. This warrants a Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The writing relies heavily on run-on sentences joined improperly with commas or coordinating conjunctions (e.g., 'the cafe before redesign was a lilttle bit not good looking ,the tables and chairs were taking a lot of space however there was no any space...'). There are frequent grammatical errors, double negatives ('doesnt offere no area'), and incorrect verb forms. Control of basic sentence structures is weak, and complex structures are largely absent or severely flawed. This earns a Band 4.0.
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