Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The two maps represents the structure of a college canteen.The old is too simple and takes a lot of modifications to enhances the cafe design.The primary setup is consists of kitchen , dinning rooms ,kitchen,toilets,tables and chairs area and also contain a bin at leftside of toilets.The present setup is too strong and beautiful and all facilities are available for customers like outdoors and indoor seatings ,a grand salad bar and vast kitchen.The new setup also have a recycling bin rather than simple bin which is needful in the recovery of substances.It also have a coffee bar and hot meal section which impress the customers truly,and beside the outdoors side there is a barbecue section for meat lovers which make the beauty of a cafe twice.A large ground has also a take away room for the transformation of materials and also for the setting and arrangements of cups , bakers and related things to cafe .Overall look show the early setup is negligible of resources and takes modifications and the new setup is plenty of everything.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to describe the changes shown in the two maps of the college canteen, noting key additions such as the salad bar, coffee bar, and outdoor seating area. However, the response falls short of a higher band because the tone is highly subjective and evaluative rather than objective and analytical (e.g., describing the new setup as "too strong and beautiful" or the barbecue section as making "the beauty of a cafe twice"). Furthermore, the overview lacks precision and the description contains some inaccurate characterizations of the visual data. To improve, the student must maintain a neutral, formal academic tone and focus on reporting the principal spatial changes and structural transformations clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text suffers significantly from a lack of proper paragraphing, as it is presented as a single dense block of text instead of distinct, logically organized paragraphs (such as an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs). Cohesive devices are minimal, mechanical, or misused, and referencing is often unclear (e.g., shifting abruptly between details without clear spatial links). The flow of information is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow a logical progression from the old plan to the redesigned layout. To achieve a higher band, the student needs to structure the response into clear paragraphs and use appropriate cohesive links to guide the reader through the comparison.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is quite basic, repetitive, and occasionally unnatural or inappropriate for an academic task (e.g., "too strong and beautiful", "meat lovers", "beauty of a cafe twice"). There are also lexical inaccuracies, such as referring to "bakers" instead of bakery items or baking equipment. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary items like "transformation" and "recycling bin", word choice and collocations are frequently flawed. To improve, the student should expand their range of descriptive vocabulary relating to architectural changes, spatial adjustments, and trends, while avoiding informal or emotional expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The student demonstrates a limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences alongside some faulty attempts at complex forms. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., "The two maps represents", "The new setup also have"), missing articles, and awkward phrasing. Punctuation is also problematic, with spacing errors following commas and periods (e.g., "canteen.The old"). While meaning is generally recoverable despite these errors, the high frequency of basic mistakes prevents the response from reaching a higher band. A greater focus on sentence variety, accurate verb forms, and punctuation is essential.
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