Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The plans in the figure illustrates the college cafe before and after redesigned.
Overall, the the two image has very difference in before and after image.
Firstly the first image carry out kitchen, serving area, staff dining room, tables and chairs and lots of many more while the otherimage has some several change the table and chair is in the out side of the whole hall and the bin is also change in to other part. So there is not any huge difference but there is sone ambence change over the room.
secondaly, there is only the some few changes applyed in the past ones and present once room. The first caffe is in the small room but the second caffe is mo0dified and make it in to a larg area.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 131 words, which significantly impacts Task Achievement. Content-wise, the student attempts to describe the changes, such as mentioning the kitchen, serving area, tables, and bins. However, the overview is extremely vague ('the two image has very difference'), and key features shown in the diagrams—like the addition of the salad bar, coffee bar, outdoor seating area, and barbecue—are either omitted or poorly described with inaccurate generalisations (e.g., claiming the whole building was modified into a larger area). This warrants a band score of 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response uses some basic sequencing words like 'Firstly' and 'secondaly', but the overall logical organisation and progression are weak. Paragraphing is chaotic, with single-sentence paragraphs that fail to structure the response effectively. Cohesive devices are repetitive and sometimes misused, and referencing is unclear ('while the otherimage has some several change the table and chair is in the out side'). Information and ideas are not arranged cohesively, leading to a confusing read that aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('room', 'image', 'change'). There are numerous word choice and spelling errors ('illustrates the college cafe before and after redesigned', 'otherimage', 'ambence', 'applyed', 'present once', 'mo0dified'). The student attempts very few less common lexical items, and those attempted are inaccurate. The limited range and frequent errors strain the reader and fit the Band 4 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. There is a very limited range of structures, with frequent basic errors in subject-verb agreement and tense usage (e.g., 'The plans in the figure illustrates', 'the two image has very difference', 'the table and chair is in the out side'). Complex structures are rarely attempted and, when used, are heavily flawed. Errors frequently distort meaning, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended message, which is characteristic of Band 4.0.
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