Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The two maps presents comperision a collage cafe between before and after redesigned.

Overall, there were a noticeable changes the serving area and staff dining rooms. Whereas, added barbecue, salad bar and outdoor seating area.

The biggest changes after design.while,made a outdoors seating for serving food and drinks to costmers . there were took 3 biggest tables with chairs and 2 small tables with chairs.Moreover in southwest sideadded barbecue for making choila or etc.

After redesigned, replace the staff dining room with two seperate rooms called, coffee bar and service area. In the first map, tables and chairs take highest area. However after redesigned there wes also add salad bar.Seving area was placed the beside the kitchen. In contrast after design that change and provide hot meals there.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response falls below the required 150-word minimum, containing only 128 words, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. While the student attempts to describe the main changes between the two plans—such as the addition of the outdoor seating, salad bar, and barbecue area, and the modification of the staff dining room—the information is presented in a fragmented and underdeveloped manner. Important details are misread or awkwardly expressed, such as the confusion regarding the serving area and the staff dining rooms. Due to the under-length penalty and the lack of a fully developed overview and detailed comparison, this falls into the Band 4.0 descriptor range.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response attempts to use a basic paragraph structure and some cohesive devices, such as 'Overall', 'Whereas', and 'Moreover', but the overall logical progression is severely disrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Paragraphing is weak, and sentences often lack clear connections to one another. Referencing between ideas is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships and transformations shown on the maps. Consequently, the organization feels mechanical and disjointed, aligning with the Band 4.0 descriptors for coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with noticeable spelling and word-choice errors that impede communication. Examples include 'comperision' for comparison, 'collage' for college, 'redesigned' used incorrectly as a noun, and 'costmers' for customers. The student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary like 'serving area', 'salad bar', and 'barbecue', but the lack of precise control over lexical items and frequent spelling mistakes restrict the range, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. There is a very limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are consistently faulty or incomplete. Examples of major errors include 'The two maps presents comperision', 'there were a noticeable changes', and 'in southwest sideadded barbecue'. Punctuation and article usage are also problematic. Because errors are frequent, distort meaning in places, and make many sentences ungrammatical, the response corresponds to Band 4.0.

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