Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The map illustrates about the plan of resigning the college cafe , and how it looks before and now.

Overall , before redesign the cafe is look like simple , but after redesign there are several of features were added and the cafe now look more advanced.

Before redesign the cafe is look like L-shaped layout with an extended rectangular section. there are only one gate for entery and another gate for exit which situated on the right side cornor. and near the exit gate the bin is situated , after the entering cafe on the right side of cornor there only one toilets bear by the bin. Now after enter the cafe , on the straight forwaerd there are two dining area ooms for the college staff. along with the all cafe covered by the tables and chairs on the main hall. after going straight on the north side the kitchen and serving area for all types of food and drink were situated.

After redesign the cafe's shape still same. The original exit or entery gates are still there, but additional gates have been installed at other corners following the cafe. after entering the cafe the bin is replcaed by the recycling bins. The toilets are just the way they are; they haven't been changed. But the dining rooms for staff were replace by more tow rooms , the righ side of the coffee bar and the left side of the food stall wjere take away the food. on the west side of the corner in straight forward the salad bar is opend. and the kitchen is still remains same but the erving area is replaced by the hot meals area. on the south side od cafe there tow new gates have been installed , one was the In front of the salad bar and another one is near by the toilets. after entering that gates the new addtion is outdoor seating area were installed with huge space with more tables and chairs. on the west side of cornor area the one more new feautre is barbecue situated in near the gate of salad bar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features of the college cafe before and after the redesign, and includes relevant comparisons. For instance, the writer correctly notes that the kitchen remains in the upper-left corner while the serving area has been transformed into a hot meals section, and highlights the addition of the outdoor seating and barbecue. However, some ideas are under-developed or lack complete clarity, such as the descriptions of the replaced staff rooms and the new takeaway and coffee bar sections. Overall, the information presented is generally accurate according to the visual data, though the level of development varies across different areas of the plan.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The text presents a coherent overall arrangement and follows a logical progression, moving from an introduction to an overview, followed by details of the cafe before and after the redesign. Paragraphing is attempted, though paragraph divisions are sometimes unconventional or missing, particularly in the longer descriptive sections. Cohesive devices are used, but they are occasionally mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent reliance on phrases like 'before redesign', 'after redesign', and 'after entering the cafe'. Referencing is also somewhat faulty at times, making it occasionally challenging to follow the exact spatial relationships between different features on the map.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to communicate basic features of the maps, such as 'kitchen', 'tables and chairs', 'toilets', and 'outdoor seating'. However, the range is limited, and there are frequent word choice and spelling inaccuracies, such as 'resigning' instead of 'redesigning', 'cornor' instead of 'corner', 'bear by' instead of 'near by', 'replcaed', 'tow' instead of 'two', and 'erving' instead of 'serving'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they restrict the lexical score because attempts at less common or precise vocabulary often lead to non-standard collocations or misspelled words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response employs a mix of simple and some complex sentence forms, though attempts at complex structures are frequently faulty. There are noticeable errors in verb tenses and agreement, such as 'the cafe is look like' and 'there are several of features were added'. Punctuation is also weak, with missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and erratic use of commas and periods. Articles and prepositions inside grammatical patterns are frequently misused, as seen in phrases like 'on the straight forwaerd' and 'on the west side of cornor area'. These persistent errors reflect a limited control of grammatical structures at this level.

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