Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

so here we are provided with the map of a cafe before its reconstruction and after its renew look.so at the very strat we are able to see that before its reconstruction it was designed very basic way the most prominnt thing we can see here is that the map before has no sufficent sitting areas but after its rebuilding the cafe has indoor and outdoor both type of sitting facility while in the previous design there were only indoor sitting arrangments in the first map there was only one genral kitchen but in the second one everything has their own different locations as you can get hot meals sideby from kitchen for salad their is seprate bar also in the same rown you can also enjoy the barbecue toilets location are same in the bot visuals yeah their is another difference we can observe is the innovation of take away food service along with coffee bar ath the place of old staff dining room

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses the task overall by highlighting key changes between the two plans, such as the introduction of outdoor seating, a salad bar, and the conversion of the staff dining rooms into take-away and coffee options. However, some aspects of the task are developed unevenly or remain vague. For example, the mention of the kitchen is somewhat imprecise, stating that 'everything has their own different locations' when the main kitchen structurally remains in the upper-left corner. While the main features are reported and relevant comparisons are made, the development of these ideas lacks the precise extension and clear overview typical of higher bands, meaning certain details are under-developed or casually described.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text suffers from a significant lack of proper organization and punctuation. The entire response is written as a single, continuous block of text without paragraph breaks or terminal punctuation like periods, which severely disrupts the logical flow and progression. Cohesive devices are minimal or absent, relying instead on run-on conversational phrasing such as 'so here we are' and 'yeah there is another difference'. While there is an underlying attempt to move from a general introduction to specific spatial comparisons, the complete absence of paragraphing and standard punctuation places the response firmly within lower-level descriptors for cohesion and arrangement.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate to communicate the basic message, featuring some relevant topic-specific terms like 'reconstruction', 'indoor and outdoor', 'take away food', and 'barbecue'. However, there is a noticeable presence of spelling errors ('strat', 'prominnt', 'sufficent', 'seprate', 'rown', 'ath'), word-form errors, and informal phrasing ('renew look', 'sideby'). Attempts to use less common vocabulary are often inaccurate. The lexical range is limited and constrained by these frequent slips and spelling issues, though they generally do not prevent the reader from understanding the overall comparisons being made.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple or poorly connected clauses strung together by conjunctions. There is a complete lack of standard punctuation, including missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and a complete absence of periods or commas. Frequent grammatical errors occur, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('toilets location are same'), missing articles ('for salad their is seprate bar'), and run-on sentence structures. These persistent errors and the lack of structural variety mean that error-free sentences are rare, placing the grammar control at this specific level.

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