Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The map illustrate that the collage cafe was redesign now and how it look now and after redesign.

Overall there was a significant change in college cafe.Where they focus on student sitting area.Like they add bench for sitting and they add barbeque for entertainment.

In the collage cafe there was not focus on student before it was redesign. We can see there was a staff draining rooms for staffs. But there is only table for students. There was not that much facilities for student.for eg:- we can see there was not much sitting area and many people have to stand while eating.

In the redesign cafe there focus was mainly in student sitting area. They have changed many areas for students like kitchen area outdoor area and and some entertainment for students. It is very beneficial to students. For eg there was a lot of students in collage but the sits are limited and many students didn't get the sit while eating and they have to stand and eat meals but their problem was solved they have add benches for students and it is very beneficial for students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task only minimally. While the writer attempts to compare the college café before and after its redesign, the coverage of the visual data is very limited and contains major omissions. Key features such as the conversion of staff rooms into a take-away food counter and coffee bar, the addition of a salad bar, and recycling bins are omitted. Instead, the text focuses heavily on repetitive personal commentary regarding student seating and a barbecue. There is no clear overview presented of the main changes shown in the plans, which restricts the quality of the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

Information and ideas are not arranged in a fully coherent manner. Although the writer attempts to divide the response into paragraphs, the overall progression is difficult to follow because ideas are disjointed and repetitive, particularly regarding student seating across multiple paragraphs. Cohesive devices are very basic or missing entirely, and referencing is unclear at times (for example, pronouns are used loosely without clear antecedents). The transitions between the description of the old layout and the new layout lack logical sequencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally impede communication. Words are frequently misused or misspelled, such as 'collage' instead of 'college', 'draining' instead of 'dining', and 'sits' instead of 'seats'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and the writer struggles to use precise terminology from the prompt or appropriate synonyms to describe changes in a diagram, relying instead on simple, everyday language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is a very limited range of sentence structures, and errors are frequent throughout the text. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex structures are often faulty or incomplete. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles (for example, 'The map illustrate', 'there was not focus', 'they have add benches'). Punctuation is also weak, with run-on sentences and missing terminal punctuation, making parts of the response difficult for the reader to follow.

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