Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The plans show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Overall, the cafe before redesigned is very simple and the cafe of today is very modren.
In contrast, the cafe before redesign is basic nowdays beacause they are many facilities in before. The site of north east is kitchen. the downward of kitchen is serving area like all food and drink. Moreover, the entrance of cafe is staff dining rooms. the centre of the cafe is tables and chairs or at the corner of this cafe is toilets and bin.
At present, the cafe is very advanced. when the staff dining room replace into coffee bar and take away food. or serving area change in hot meals and at the south east is salad bar and at the corner of south barbecue. In aditionally, the outside of the cafe is outdoor seating. Recycling bins is larger than before cafe. the cafe is very modren before than.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by comparing the two college café plans, presenting an overview and highlighting some key changes such as the addition of outdoor seating, a barbecue, and a salad bar. However, the task is only partially addressed because several descriptions are confusing, inaccurate, or poorly developed. For instance, the student states that 'the entrance of cafe is staff dining rooms' and misinterprets the layout by placing the staff dining rooms at the north-east rather than recognising the structural transition into a coffee bar and take-away area. The overview is overly simplistic, and the overall selection of features lacks clarity and a fully coherent comparative structure, placing the response firmly at this level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, body description, and concluding observations, but the text lacks a clear overall progression. The use of cohesive devices is frequently mechanical, inaccurate, or confusing, such as 'In contrast, the cafe before redesign is basic nowdays', 'In aditionally', and abrupt transitional phrases like 'or serving area change in hot meals'. Paragraphing is not effectively managed to separate distinct areas of the layout or to distinctly group past versus present features. Referencing is also unclear at times, leaving the reader to guess which parts of the plan are being described, resulting in a disjointed reading experience.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very limited and basic, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that strain comprehension. Examples include 'modren' instead of 'modern', 'nowdays' instead of 'nowadays', and awkward collocations like 'the downward of kitchen' and 'staff dining room replace into coffee bar'. The student attempts some task-specific terminology such as 'salad bar', 'take away food', and 'outdoor seating', but overall the lexical range is restricted, and repetitive or inaccurate word forms impede natural communication throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent structural faults. There are persistent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, articles, and prepositions, such as 'the cafe before redesigned', 'they are many facilities in before', 'the entrance of cafe', and 'Recycling bins is larger'. Attempts at complex or comparative structures are faulty, as seen in 'the cafe is very modren before than.' Frequent grammatical errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and reflect a restricted control over sentence patterns.
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