Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The maps dipicts the trend of change happened at college cafe, and what it look like now.
Overall, cafe added alot of more meal facilities like Salad bar, Barbecue, Coffee bar and also add some outdoor seatings. But kitchen, toilets. tables and chairs are at their own places. Beside that the area also increased by the addition of Barbecue and Outdoor seating area.
Firstely looking the indoor, serving area are replaced by hot meals section and two rooms staff dining change into the take away and coffee bar section. Moreover salad bar also appears and bin had changed into recycle bin, in addition kitchen and toilets are still at their same loction. The notable point is that facilities like staff dinning and serving are totally removed in the present infrastructure of cafe.
Regarding the outdoor barbecue bar has been seen today which might not seen before, also cafe expand their seating area by addition of outdoor seating, which also not seen in past. And beside the barbecue section the new entrance and exit door build, for those people who want to go indoor seating area.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0
The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons between the two plans. You clearly identified key changes, such as the removal of staff dining rooms, the addition of the salad bar, coffee bar, and outdoor seating, and noted features that remained unchanged, like the kitchen and toilets. The overview paragraph captures the primary transformations well. However, some details are slightly over-generalized or lack precise spatial referencing, which keeps the response at this level. To reach higher bands, you could ensure every key feature is described with greater precision regarding its exact location and relationship to other parts of the plan.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a coherent overall arrangement and follows a logical structure by dividing the information into an introduction, an overview, an indoor comparison, and an outdoor comparison. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different aspects of the visual data. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or faulty, with repetitive transitions such as 'Firstely looking the indoor' and 'Regarding the outdoor'. Referencing and logical progression could be smoother. To improve, you need to use a wider variety of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that sentences flow into one another without abrupt shifts.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, demonstrating attempts at less common items such as 'infrastructure', 'redevelopment', and 'recycled'. However, there are noticeable lexical errors, awkward word choices, and spelling mistakes throughout the text, such as 'dipicts' instead of depicts, 'alot' instead of a lot, and 'loction' instead of location. Some phrases like 'barbecue bar' are unnatural collocations. To achieve a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary, improve spelling accuracy, and use precise collocations appropriate for describing visual data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing shows a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but it is marred by frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb forms, tense consistency, and missing articles. Examples include 'the trend of change happened at college cafe', 'what it look like now', 'two rooms staff dining change', and 'new entrance and exit door build'. Punctuation and subject-verb agreement also show consistent errors. To improve your grammar score, you should focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring correct passive voice formations, and proofreading carefully for tense consistency when describing past and present states.
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