Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The two maps illustrate the changes in the college cafe and compared after redesigned how it looks now.
Overall, it is clear that, college cafe before kitchen serving area available all food and drink but now not provided anything also build hot meals served to students.In contrast, now college cafe gives a barbecue facility with outdoor seating,
On the one hand, before was not proper buid cafe just less facilty in a college. In addition, now there are lots of inventions like staff dining rooms transform in take away food and coffee bar its a big change.
On the other hand, In present built salad bar for nutrients many students avoid fast food and prefred eat salad to maintain the health and figure. Furthermore, before bin and now recycled bin in advancement the cafe.Therefore, currently college cafe give facility to students and other facilty member good environment like outdoor sitting eat barbecue and enjoy meals.
In comparison, college cafe was redsedigned looks now is most beautiful also provides good atmosphere and add items in menu
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making comparisons between the two plans, which earns it a solid standing at this level. You successfully identified key transformations, such as the addition of the outdoor seating area, the barbecue, and the changes along the northern wall where the staff dining rooms were replaced by a coffee bar and take away food section. However, some ideas are under-developed or unclear, such as the confusing statement that 'before kitchen serving area available all food and drink but now not provided anything'. To reach a higher level, you should extend and support your points with greater clarity and precision, ensuring that all descriptive comparisons strictly reflect the provided visual data without ambiguity.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response demonstrates an overall arrangement of ideas, utilising transition signals like 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In comparison' to structure the writing. However, the progression is sometimes difficult to follow because of mechanical cohesion and abrupt shifts between sentences. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical flow within paragraphs is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and missing links between clauses. To improve Coherence and Cohesion, you need to ensure that each paragraph builds logically on the previous one and that cohesive devices connect ideas smoothly without causing confusion for the reader.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
Your vocabulary range is adequate for the task, allowing you to describe features like the 'salad bar', 'outdoor seating', and 'barbecue'. You make several attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'transform' and 'advancement', but these are accompanied by word choice and word formation inaccuracies, such as using 'recycled bin' instead of 'recycling bins' or 'prefred eat salad'. While these vocabulary errors do not completely impede communication, they restrict your score. To achieve a higher band, you must demonstrate more precise word choices, better control of collocations, and fewer lexical errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
You use a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, word order, and missing articles or prepositions, such as 'before was not proper buid cafe' and 'in present built salad bar'. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and missing commas affecting readability. Although these errors rarely completely distort the overall meaning, they are persistent throughout the text. To improve your grammar score, you should focus on constructing complete sentences with correct subjects and verbs, minimizing basic structural errors, and improving your command of complex sentence patterns.
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