Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The comparesine map elcudates the information about the college cafes redesign .This maps show the major difference about the cafe before,s rediesign and after the redesign how its looks overall we can see there before the redesign off cafe here's same facilities list before redesign there are a Kitchen,Serving area ,Staff dining rooms,bin,toilets and some chairs are on the cafe .Now pouring some lights on the cafe after redesign we can see there the developer add some extra things on it .now today the cafes map totally changed and upgraded here are the list off new food and facilties Hot meal, Salad bar ,Barbecue ,Outdoor sitting area ,Coffee bar Take away food and extra Recycling bins and the demolished the old Staaf dining rooms and made a perfect Outdoor seating area .Overall the comparisons maps show the huge difference on there
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response partially addresses the task by outlining some main changes between the two maps, such as the introduction of a salad bar, barbecue, and outdoor seating. However, the word count requirement of at least 150 words is not met, as the response falls short at 141 words. Furthermore, the selection of features is somewhat mechanical, relying on a basic listing approach rather than a well-organised summary of key spatial shifts. The overview is repetitive and lacks depth, failing to fully articulate the overall spatial transformation of the college cafe.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response lacks a clear overall progression and is hindered by poor paragraphing, as the entire text is presented as a single dense block. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as the repetitive use of conversational connectors like 'Now pouring some lights on the cafe after redesign'. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the lack of logical sequencing between sentences makes it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial comparisons effectively.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'comparesine' instead of 'comparison', 'rediesign' instead of 'redesign', 'Staaf' instead of 'staff', and 'sitting' instead of 'seating'. While the student attempts to name specific features from the visual data, these lexical slips and repetitive phrasing restrict the range and occasionally impede clear communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple clauses that are frequently strung together with punctuation errors and run-on phrasing. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles, incorrect verb forms ('there are a Kitchen'), and problems with pluralisation and subject-verb agreement ('the cafes map totally changed'). These persistent errors can cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from achieving a higher level of structural accuracy.
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