Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the floor plane illustrate the structure modification made to a collage cafe before and after a recent desighn

Overall the layout has been updated to new tructured add some more conveneint like avery portion sepreted like a hot meals cabine, salad bar, coffe bar, barbecue, take away food and a most important have outdoor seats for sitting and enjoye the meal.

In the orignal desighn, a single serving area in front of a kitchen supplied all food and drink. Following the redesign, in the front a kitchen and more cabine add for conveneince like a salad bar, hot meals, barbecue on the left side. take away food and cofee bar same side located and on right side of the coffe bar a recycling bins and a most importatnt thing is seatting area and add outdoor seating lock more atractive and beatifull previous design.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response attempts to summarize the changes between the two plans, identifying several key alterations such as the addition of the salad bar, coffee bar, and outdoor seating. However, the information presented is somewhat disjointed and lacks a fully developed overview. Furthermore, the length requirement has not been met, as the text falls short of the minimum 150-word count. To reach a higher level, you should ensure the response meets the minimum word length and provide a clearer, more structured overview that groups related changes together logically.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response shows an attempt to organize the information with an introductory comment followed by body details, but there is no clear overall progression. Paragraphing is weak, and cohesive devices are inadequate or repetitive, leading to a choppy flow. Phrases like 'In the orignal desighn' and 'Following the redesign' attempt to guide the reader, but referencing is often unclear, making it hard to follow the spatial relationships between the various features on the plans. Improving paragraph structure and using a wider range of transitional phrases will enhance the overall flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word form that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Words such as 'plane' instead of plan, 'collage' instead of college, 'desighn', 'tructured', and 'conveneint' impede communication. While you attempt less common items related to the diagram like 'barbecue' and 'salad bar', persistent spelling mistakes and incorrect morphological forms restrict your score in this area. Focus on accurate spelling and expanding your repertoire of descriptive vocabulary for describing visual data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Grammar and sentence structure are very restricted, relying heavily on simple clauses and faulty attempts at complex sentences. There are frequent errors in verb forms, articles, and prepositions, such as 'the floor plane illustrate', 'add some more conveneint', and 'seatting area and add outdoor seating lock more atractive'. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences lacking proper terminal punctuation. To improve, you need to work on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and reducing the frequency of grammatical errors that disrupt the reading process.

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