Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The cafe before redesige its look like a normal cafe.futhermore its seen like a uncomplete cafe before rebuild. moreover there are looking only a kitchen and staff dining room and the corner on a cafe is shows there is a restroom and side of the toilet there is a dustbin for the unuse things you should throw on it. moreover in the cafe there are soo many tables and chair in rest of the cafe space.
After the complete desinge today its look very good and there are many things added. The things added its a the in the kicthen they added a hot meals surving tables and moreover in the of its the table of salad bar and barbecue. futhermore i seen the one of most singnificant things after the desinge its outdoor seating area.
moreover in the inside of cafe the added the coffee bar and take away food middle of the inside cafe.
Hence its look very good today
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the task only partially, presenting a rudimentary summary of the changes shown in the cafe plans. While some main features are mentioned, such as the addition of the outdoor seating area, hot meals counter, and salad bar, the information is conveyed through a very limited and repetitive selection of details. Furthermore, the descriptions lack clarity and precision, failing to provide a well-developed comparison between the two layouts. To reach a higher level, the response needs to provide a clearer overview of the main trends and changes, supporting them with a more comprehensive and logical selection of data from both diagrams.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some organisation in the way the text contrasts the cafe 'before' and 'today', but there is no clear overall progression. The writing is heavily fragmented into short, disjointed sentences and paragraphs rather than a cohesive report. Cohesive devices are used repetitively and inappropriately, notably the excessive use of informal connectors like 'moreover' and 'futhermore' to link almost every sentence. Paragraphing is poorly handled, resulting in a lack of logical flow between ideas. To improve, the writer should structure the response into a coherent introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, using a wider and more accurate range of cohesive ties to connect ideas smoothly.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The lexical resource is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying on simple terms like 'cafe', 'good', and 'things' throughout the text. There are numerous noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word formation, such as 'redesige' for redesign, 'uncomplete', 'surving', and 'singnificant'. These errors and the narrow range of vocabulary sometimes cause strain and difficulty for the reader in understanding the precise meaning. To achieve a higher score, the writer needs to incorporate a broader range of task-specific vocabulary and accurate collocations related to describing maps and spatial changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple, and attempts at more complex or descriptive forms are heavily flawed, such as 'its look like a normal cafe' or 'there are looking only a kitchen'. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, articles, and prepositions, including phrases like 'in the of its the table' and 'in the inside of cafe'. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader. To progress, the student must work on constructing grammatically sound sentences, improving control over basic verb forms, and reducing error frequency across all structural types.
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