Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The follwoing grapichs depict bith of layour of a former cafe design and the redevelpoment of the current one.
Overall, it can. be observed that the update layout contemplate the incorporation of a salad bar in the main room, as well as, the extension of the southest part with a massive outdoor seating and a barbaque zone.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response is severely under length, containing only 57 words compared to the minimum requirement of 150 words. Because of this extreme brevity, the task is addressed only minimally. While the student attempts an overview and mentions a couple of changes such as the salad bar and outdoor seating, key features of the two plans are largely omitted and the information is far too brief to constitute a proper summary or meet the demands of an Academic Task 1 response.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The writing demonstrates a basic attempt at organisation, featuring an introductory sentence and an overall paragraph introduced by 'Overall, it can be observed that...'. However, due to the extremely short length, logical progression is minimal. Basic cohesive devices are attempted, such as 'as well as', but paragraphing and overall structural development are severely constrained by the brevity of the text.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very limited and basic, with numerous spelling and word-form errors that strain comprehension, such as 'follwoing', 'grapichs', 'bith', 'layour', 'redevelpoment', 'southest', and 'barbaque'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary like 'incorporation' and 'extension', but the high density of lexical inaccuracies prevents the response from reaching a higher level of lexical performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. The attempt at a complex structure is flawed by errors in agreement and punctuation, such as 'it can. be observed that the update layout contemplate...'. There are noticeable mistakes in verb forms, word forms within grammatical patterns, and punctuation marks, reflecting restricted grammatical control overall.
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