Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The two maps illustrate the college cafe before how it is looked and after devlopment how it is today.
Overall, it is clear that the maps the significant changes and became more modern. In the present new facilities are provided such as take away food, coffe bar, salad bar and barbecue which is located outside of main building. Alough, kitchen and toilets area are remained the same.
The cafe before redesign it was have limited area were providing such as kitchen which located on north west corner of the map and besides the kithen there were drinking as well as fooding facalities. Tables and chairs are located in the centre and top of the north staff dinning rooms situated. On the eastnside bin allocated.
At the present, cafe is served various of facalities. New changes such as, salad bar, hot meals, coffebar and take away food type of facalities has been added. The big changed is cafe opend outdoor seating. a
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by providing an overview and reporting the main features of the college cafe before and after the redesign. Key changes such as the addition of the salad bar, coffee bar, and outdoor seating are mentioned, meeting the requirements of this level. However, some areas are under-developed or lack full clarity. For instance, the transition from staff dining rooms to a takeaway food and coffee bar is phrased awkwardly as 'top of the north staff dinning rooms situated'. While an overall trend is identified, the description would benefit from a more thorough comparison of spatial reorganisation to move to a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt at paragraphing, separating the introduction, overview, past layout, and present layout. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical and faulty. Phrases like 'The cafe before redesign it was have' and 'At the present, cafe is served' disrupt the logical flow. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the use of cohesive devices is basic rather than flexible. To improve, the writer needs to ensure smoother transitions between sentences and paragraphs using more natural conjunctive ties and better referencing pronouns.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully communicating basic ideas about the maps, but it remains limited and contains frequent word choice and spelling errors that show an incomplete control of lexical features. Examples include 'devlopment', 'coffe bar', 'eastnside', and 'facalities'. The student attempts less common vocabulary such as 'redesign', 'barbecue', and 'recycled' (implied via recycling bins), but word formation and collocation errors, such as 'fooding facalities' and 'The big changed', impede precision and prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The writing displays a limited mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but it is heavily impacted by frequent grammatical errors. There are notable issues with verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'before how it is looked', 'cafe before redesign it was have', and 'barbecue which is located'. Article usage is also inconsistent throughout the text, as seen in 'on north west corner'. While these errors rarely completely obscure the overall meaning, their frequency across simple and attempted complex structures keeps the score at this level.
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