Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The chart show below the information of institutions, cafe bar before and after redesigned it look like before and after.
Overall, the data of Selectingand reportigas well as main features, and comparision of the cafe before and after the renovations.
Firstly, the plan shows about the major changes of old cafe kitchen and , serving area include all food and drinks, as well as the staff dining room staright to hall tables and chairs, are sittingin in open area hall, Bin and Toilet ,area main to the entrance.
Secondly, the major changing of that places main entrance on the other side Recycling, bins,Barbecue on the outdoor sitting area. Kitchen are seprate in the cafe . .Pupis are easily to take way food, well that is the change of cafe increase and substantia change of outdoor door sitting areas, major facts of that that is the several chanages of before and after that period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response makes a minimal attempt to address the prompt by mentioning features of the cafe before and after the redesign, such as the kitchen, serving area, and outdoor seating. However, the information is communicated in a very disjointed and unclear manner. Instead of presenting a well-structured summary with clear comparisons of the key alterations, the writing drifts into vague descriptions and repeats general statements about the changes without properly reporting the specific spatial transformations shown in the plans. Ideas are very limited and poorly developed, lacking an effective overview of the main trends.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
Information and ideas are not arranged coherently throughout the response. The text is divided into awkward paragraphs, but the progression of thoughts lacks clear logical links. Transitions such as 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' are used, but they fail to structure the information logically because the sentences themselves are tangled and confusing. Furthermore, referencing and paragraph unity are weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow a clear storyline or comparison between the two floor plans.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on lifted phrases from the prompt or task instructions, such as 'cafe bar before and after redesigned' and 'main features'. There are frequent errors in word choice, word form, and spelling—such as 'redesigned it', 'Selectingand reportigas', 'staright', 'sittingin', and 'seprate'. These lexical inadequacies and frequent spelling mistakes often strain the reader and obscure the precise meaning intended regarding the architectural changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The writing displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and the sentences are frequently malformed. There are persistent errors in basic syntax, verb forms, articles, and prepositions, as seen in expressions like 'The chart show below the information', 'the plan shows about the major changes', and 'Pupis are easily to take way food'. Complex sentences are attempted but result in heavily distorted meaning and grammatical breakdown. Punctuation is also erratic, with misplaced periods and spacing issues causing frequent disruptions to readability.
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