Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustrate cafe before redesign and cafe today.The new design is the transform version of the old one.

In the old cafe all the foods was served from the kitchen however today's model shows a separate cabin for hot meals,salad baar and barbecue while near the kitchen staff dinning rooms has been changed for take away food and coffee bar however the tables,chairs and the toilet remains the same as before.

The bin from the previous has replaced to recycling bin and also outdoor seating is adjusted in front of the barbecue cabin as per new look of the todays cafe.

The main change is there was one entrance in the previous design while the new design have two entrances and two exits one to the right of coffee bar while second in the two side of front hall near the outdoor seating.

The old cafe design was very basic where all the servings was from the kitchen and limited tables and chairs usually design for less people while the new design has everything in order and more room for people and different sections of servings

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses the task by outlining the main changes between the college cafe before and after the redesign. It covers key features such as the kitchen, the new food stations like the salad bar and coffee bar, and the addition of outdoor seating and a barbecue. However, some aspects are under-developed or lack clarity, such as the confusion regarding entrances and exits compared to the actual plan. While an overview is attempted, it is partially integrated rather than standing out clearly as a summary of main trends, placing this aspect firmly within the expectations for this level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The writing demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a recognisable beginning and end, attempting to group related features together. However, progression is sometimes faulty and mechanical. The text lacks adequate paragraphing, being condensed into dense blocks that make logical transitions harder to follow. Furthermore, cohesive devices are sometimes inaccurate or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'however' and 'while' without proper punctuation or precise structural control, leading to run-on sentences and unclear referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

An adequate range of vocabulary is used for the task, attempting less common items such as 'transform version', 'cabin', and 'redesign'. However, there are notable inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as referring to service counters as a 'cabin' instead of an area or counter, and spelling errors like 'salad baar' and 'dinning'. These lexical slips and spelling inaccuracies do not seriously impede overall communication, but they restrict the response from achieving a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors regarding subject-verb agreement and prepositions, such as 'The graph illustrate', 'foods was served', and 'from the previous has replaced to recycling bin'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing periods and commas leading to run-on sentences like 'The new design is the transform version of the old one. In the old cafe all the foods...'. These errors require some effort from the reader to parse, though meaning is still generally conveyed.

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