Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this charts shows a difference between a collage cafe before and after renovated. Both a looke very different.

In the first chart shows a caffe before renovate, Before redesign the caffe looked simple The kitchen is in the first and after kitchen area there is one service are . In this service are all the drink and food avalable. The next to the service the staff dining rooms, there are two dinning rooms for the staff. In the middle of the caffe there are some chairs and tables for the customers. And the last one is lefe side of the caffe there are one bin for garbeg and after this bin one toilets for every one.

In the second chart, The kitchen is same place but the service area is now convert in hot meals. Replace with staff dinning room now take away food and coffee bar . One more think is add and this is a left side of the bar and the area name is salad bar.Middle of the caffe tables and chairs area is same. Right side of the cafe now two bins, and toilets area.Futhermore is there are some outdoor seating are is add in the renovating caffe.

In concution, In this two charts shows differenes between the renovationg caffe, futhermore is that there are lots of changes between both of them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the kitchen remaining in place, the serving counter becoming a hot-meals area, the staff rooms being replaced by takeaway food and a coffee bar, and the addition of outdoor seating. However, the account is only partly complete and some locations are misreported: the bin is on the eastern wall, not the left side, and the toilets are in the bottom-right corner rather than after the bin on the left. The outdoor barbecue and the new salad bar are mentioned only briefly, and there is no clear overview that groups the main changes. To strengthen the response, summarise the overall transformation first, then describe the key internal and external changes accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, moving from the original café to the redesigned one and ending with a conclusion. This gives the reader a general sense of the comparison. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the first description moves from the kitchen to staff rooms and then to the bin and toilets, but the locations become confusing, while the second paragraph combines several changes without a consistent spatial order. Linking phrases such as “In the second chart” and “Furthermore” help, but repeated “and” connections and unclear references make the account feel list-like. Organise each plan in a clear route around the building, and use concise comparisons to connect corresponding features.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “kitchen,” “staff dining rooms,” “tables and chairs,” “hot meals,” and “outdoor seating,” so the main subject is usually recognisable. However, the range is basic and several inaccurate or misspelled forms make the description less clear, such as “service are,” “garbeg,” “dinning,” and “renovating caffe.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “one more think is add” and “all the drink and food avalable.” Use precise plan vocabulary and check spelling and word forms; for example, “serving area,” “rubbish bin,” and “was added” would communicate the features more clearly. Avoid repeating “caffe” and “area” when a more specific noun is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences rely on simple present-tense statements, and attempts to combine ideas often produce faulty structures. For example, “In this charts shows a difference” lacks a clear subject, while “Replace with staff dinning room now take away food and coffee bar” is not a complete sentence. Articles, agreement, and verb forms are also inconsistent in phrases such as “there are one bin” and “the area name is salad bar.” Capitalisation and punctuation are irregular, with sentence boundaries missing in places. These errors sometimes make relationships between features difficult to follow. Practise complete subject–verb sentences and use accurate passive forms for changes, such as “The staff dining rooms were replaced by a takeaway counter and coffee bar.”

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