Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The map illustrates the changes made in the college cafe before and after redesigning it.

Overall, the cafe designed before has a lot of space in the front which is planned to be transformed into a outdoor seating area with a barbecue making good utilisation of the property along with change of scenery for the customers. Staff dining area was also replaced by takeaway food section and coffee bar to increase the revenue.

Looking first at the entrance there is new outdoor seating area and barbecue. Right after entering the cafe, there is a new section called salad bar. Just top of that section is the kitchen and at the left bottom corner was the serving area planned to be renamed as hot meals.

Currently the staff dinning room just adjacent to the kitchen is proposed to be the takeaway and coffee bar. moving forward is the bin area which will be now recycling area where all the waste will be segre

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation: the former staff dining rooms become takeaway and coffee facilities, and outdoor seating with a barbecue is added. You also note the kitchen, serving counter becoming a hot-meals counter, salad bar and recycling provision. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the outdoor area is described as being “in the front,” and the serving area is placed at the “left bottom corner,” although it lies beside the kitchen in the upper-left part of the plan. The overview also adds unsupported purposes such as increasing revenue and changing the scenery. The central seating area and toilets, which remain, are not clearly compared. A more precise overview and fuller, accurate coverage of what stays and what changes would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable overview followed by an attempt to describe locations, so the reader can follow its broad purpose. However, progression becomes difficult in the final paragraph: “Currently the staff dinning room…” is followed by “moving forward is the bin area,” and the response ends mid-idea with “where all the waste will be segre”. This leaves the comparison incomplete. Some linking and location phrases are also imprecise, such as “Right after entering” and “Just top of that section,” making the spatial relationships harder to track. Organise the body by comparing corresponding areas of the two plans, and use clear references such as “along the western wall” or “in the south-east corner.”

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a relevant range of plan-related vocabulary, including “outdoor seating area,” “barbecue,” “takeaway food section,” and “recycling area,” which generally communicates the changes. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “utilisation,” but “making good utilisation of the property” is an unnatural collocation, and “change of scenery” is not a precise description of a plan feature. Some word choices and forms reduce clarity, including “dinning” for “dining” and “segreg” at the end. Aim for concise, conventional language for describing maps rather than adding speculative benefits. More accurate terms for position and function would make the description more precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including the overview sentence beginning “Overall” and the clause “which is planned to be transformed.” Meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “a outdoor seating area” needs the article “an,” and “The cafe designed before” has an awkward and incomplete structure; “the café before the redesign” would be clearer. Tense and sentence control are inconsistent in “was the serving area planned to be renamed,” while “Currently the staff dinning room…” begins a new sentence without a capital letter after the preceding full stop. The final sentence is also unfinished. Check articles, sentence boundaries and consistent past-versus-present descriptions when revising.

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