Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The process diagram compares the college cafe that was redesigned an what it looked before and how it looks now.

Overall, as we can see that, there is a countless new things added which didn't exist before. The outdoor seating at the outside of the caffe is built now alongside the part is consumed for barbecue, whereas before redesign there is nothing outside of the cafe. Many changes occured as well, expansion of toilets and recycling bins right there.

before the redesign, the some part of kitchen as known as serving area which change to the hot meals now. While, at the right side of the kitchen there is staff dinning rooms, that took apart to two rooms and make these rooms useful in a sense of take away food and coffee bar. salad bar is newly built at the nearside of the kitchen which is truly include in the adding of new things.

However, there is new place that kept useful now is the outdoor seating with five tables to sit. At the very left of the outdoor seating there is new place added now which barbecue. The expansion of recycling bins and toilets are signicantly noticeable during the redesigned of college cafe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad contrast between the original café and its redesigned version, including the new outdoor seating and barbecue, the change from a general serving area to hot meals, and the replacement of staff dining rooms with takeaway food and a coffee bar. However, several details are inaccurate or unclear: the staff rooms were already two rooms, rather than being divided into two during the redesign; the outdoor area has four tables, not five; and the toilets and recycling bins were not expanded. The overview also calls the changes “countless” without clearly summarising the main internal changes. To strengthen the report, describe the unchanged features as well as the additions and replacements, and check each location and quantity against the plans.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, an attempted overview, and two body paragraphs, so there is some organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because related features are repeated or placed in unclear groupings. For example, the outdoor seating and barbecue appear in both the overview and final paragraph, while the kitchen, serving counter, staff rooms, and salad bar are crowded into one paragraph. Linking words such as “While,” and “However” do not always show a clear contrast, and “right there” has an unclear reference. Group the changes by area—for example, internal facilities first and outdoor additions second—and use straightforward links such as “In addition” or “By contrast” only where they fit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “redesigned,” “outdoor seating,” “serving area,” and “recycling bins.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the description imprecise, such as “countless new things,” “part is consumed for barbecue,” and “took apart.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “caffe,” “dinning,” “occured,” and “signicantly.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to understand. Aim for precise plan-description language, such as “was converted into,” “was replaced by,” and “was added,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, but complex constructions are often faulty and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. For instance, “The process diagram compares the college cafe that was redesigned an what it looked before” has problems with the conjunction and clause structure; “Overall, as we can see that” uses an unnecessary construction; and “the some part of kitchen … which change” has article, word-order, and verb-form errors. Sentence boundaries and capitalization are also inconsistent, as in the lowercase “before” and “salad bar” after full stops. Practise accurate past and present forms when comparing the plans, and build shorter, complete sentences before combining ideas with subordinate clauses.

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