Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

These diagrams represent a college cafe, before and after, it was redesigned and what changes it has adopted after been redesigned.

Before redesigning, the cafe had a single entrance, two rooms were given for staff dining, and the kitchen was at the far last right corner of the cafe with a serving window into the hall, where food and drinks were served. The hall was all filled with tables and chairs for customers. There was a bin on the left side, just beside the entrance door, while the toilets exists in the corner next to the bin.

After redesigning, the staff dining rooms are converted, one into a coffee bar and the other into a takeaway food counter, while the kitchen window is just used for serving hot meals. A new salad bar is introduced at the far end of the cafe's enterance. The hall remained as same. A new outdoor seating area is inaugurated where barbecue counter was placed and barbecue is served, two openings from the hall was opened to this outdoor seating area. The bin is replaced by recycling bins, however, the toilets remained as they were earlier.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the conversion of the staff rooms into a coffee bar and takeaway counter, the addition of a salad bar and outdoor seating, and the replacement of the bin with recycling bins. However, some key details are inaccurate or unclear: the kitchen was in the upper-left, not the “far last right corner,” and the bin was on the eastern side below the entrance, not on the left beside it. The overview is also limited; “The hall remained as same” does not explain that the central seating area stayed while the café gained new food facilities and an outdoor extension. The barbecue is an area outside, rather than a counter where barbecue is served. More precise reporting of the layout would make the summary more complete and reliable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear before-and-after structure, with one paragraph describing the original café and another explaining the redesign. This gives the reader a generally coherent progression, and linking expressions such as “After redesigning,” “while,” and “however” help connect comparisons. The sequence within each paragraph is mostly understandable, although the description sometimes jumps between locations without a consistent route around the plan. Some links are also awkward or unclear, particularly “where barbecue counter was placed,” which makes the relationship between the outdoor seating and barbecue difficult to follow. Organising each paragraph by area—for example, north, west, centre, and south—and using clearer references would make the progression more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for describing changes and locations, including “converted,” “introduced,” “replaced,” and “remained.” These choices help communicate the main transformations, and the meaning is generally clear. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “after been redesigned,” “far last right corner,” “hall was all filled,” and “outdoor seating area is inaugurated” do not express the plan details naturally. “Barbecue counter” also mislabels the barbecue area. Use standard map-description language such as “located,” “situated,” “was added,” and “was converted into,” and check spelling, including “entrance.” This would improve precision while retaining your useful range of change-related vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including comparisons linked with “while” and “however,” and the overall meaning can usually be followed. Some grammatical errors nevertheless reduce accuracy. For example, “after been redesigned” needs a passive form such as “after being redesigned,” while “the toilets exists” has incorrect subject–verb agreement and tense. In “two openings from the hall was opened,” the plural subject requires “were,” and the sentence repeats the idea of openings and being opened. Articles and sentence construction also need attention in phrases such as “where barbecue counter was placed.” Practise consistent past-tense descriptions of the former plan and present-tense descriptions of the current one, alongside accurate agreement and passive forms.

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