Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

overall, the given diagram tell us about, how the cafe of a collage looks, before it was changed the design and how it looks now.

overall, lots of chnges were seen, in both of the maps.Like directions of many places chnged, in these of two maps.In this diagram, we see illustrate that the direction of kitchen, toilets, bin and waiting area remains the same.

staff dinning rooms are now chnged with cofee bar and take away food area.And also seating area is added.

Firstly, we talk about the locations which are changed in the plan like, staff rooms are now take away food and for coffee bar. and also salad bar was added in the left bottom corrner. secondly, there is now, space available for seating outsiders. Also some space occupied by the barbecue for the staff.

Now, talk about the places, which remains same like kitchen and toilets.

To some up, topic have some draw backs like, there is much space occupied by tables and chairs, which can also be used.and also have no space left for parking.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad purpose of the plans and note several relevant changes, including the replacement of the staff dining rooms with takeaway and coffee areas, the addition of a salad bar and outdoor seating, and the continued presence of the kitchen and toilets. However, the account is only partly complete and some details are inaccurate or unclear. For example, the barbecue is described as being “for the staff,” although the plan only shows its location outside, and the claim that “directions” changed is not supported. The overview also misses key comparisons, such as the new hot-meals counter and recycling bins replacing the single bin. Avoid adding opinions about drawbacks or parking, which are not shown in the plans, and use the space to report the main changes more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response with an overview followed by details, and phrases such as “Firstly” and “Now” signal a change of focus. However, progression is difficult to follow because the ideas are repeated or grouped loosely: the staff-room changes appear in both the overview and the next paragraph, while the final paragraph introduces unsupported comments about drawbacks and parking. Several transitions are awkward or inaccurate, including “To some up,” and the repeated “overall” does not create a clear structure. Use a concise overview, then organise the body by features that changed and features that remained, with each point stated once and linked clearly to the plan.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “kitchen,” “toilets,” “seating area,” and “barbecue,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the description less precise, such as “collage,” “dinning,” “cofee,” and “corrner.” Some phrases are also unsuitable for describing a plan: “directions of many places changed” is unclear, and “seating outsiders” does not accurately name the outdoor seating area. Build a more reliable set of map-description terms, such as “located,” “replaced by,” “added,” and “remained unchanged,” and check spelling carefully. Avoid using “drawbacks” for neutral plan features.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences communicate a basic idea, but grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between features unclear. For example, “the given diagram tell us” has subject–verb disagreement, while “staff dinning rooms are now chnged with cofee bar” has an incorrect verb construction and unclear singular/plural forms. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “there is now, space available” and the run-on final sentence beginning “To some up.” The response relies mainly on short, simple statements and does not yet control more varied structures. Practise accurate past and present forms for comparing plans, and use complete sentences such as “The staff dining rooms were replaced by a takeaway area and a coffee bar.”

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