Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Two pictures demonstrating the design of the cafe before it was revamped and other is the pictorial representation of how it looks now, and how the redesign of the cafe was achieved.

Before the Cafe was renovated it had a classically designed interior and seating area, it had a dedicated kitchen and serving area just below to it. Moreover, it had staff dining rooms and simple table chairs, along with that cafe had a dust bin just at the enterance of the cafe and near the toilets area.

Now, after the revamping the cafe has kitchen in same place as it was before, but serving area has been replaced by dedicated place for hot meals. Salad bar has been added to the cafe which is on far left side of the cafe just infront of kitchen enterance, furthermore the highly demanded barbecue section has been added additionaly. Staff dining rooms now used for takeaway food section and coffee bar respectively. Recyling bins have been placed in replacement to bins, another excellent addition is outdoor seating to get the closer feel of live barbecue to reach the outdoor seating two door have been installed on lower boundary wall of the cafe.

Finally, to conclude the new design and how it used to look before redesigning, the cafe has got into modern shape and which is highly regarded by the customers these days.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main changes and make a clear comparison between the café before and after renovation. Accurate points include the kitchen remaining in the same place, the serving area becoming a hot-meals counter, the staff rooms being replaced by takeaway and coffee facilities, and recycling bins replacing the bin. However, some important details are missing or unclear: the new salad bar is on the western wall, and the outdoor area includes tables and chairs as well as a barbecue immediately to its south-west. The claim that the barbecue is “highly demanded” and that the new design is “highly regarded by the customers” is not shown in the plans. A more objective overview of the main spatial changes, without unsupported claims, would make the report more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: it introduces the plans, describes the former café, explains the current layout, and ends with a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Before,” “Now,” and “Finally” help the reader follow the comparison. However, the final evaluative conclusion repeats the idea of redesign rather than summarising the key changes, and some long sentences combine several features, making their relationships less clear. For example, the sentence beginning “Now, after the revamping” moves from the kitchen to the salad bar, barbecue, staff rooms, bins, and outdoor access without clear grouping. Organising the details by areas of the plan and using clearer sentence boundaries would create smoother progression and less mechanical linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing a redesign, including “replaced,” “dedicated,” “section,” and “outdoor seating.” These choices communicate the main changes, and some less common expressions show an attempt to vary your language. However, several choices are imprecise or too evaluative for an objective plan description: “classically designed,” “highly demanded,” and “highly regarded by the customers” add meanings that the diagram does not establish. There are also spelling errors, including “enterance,” “Recyling,” and “additionaly,” and some awkward collocations such as “closer feel of live barbecue.” Use neutral, precise terms for locations and facilities, and check spelling and collocation to make the description more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses linked with “but,” “which,” and “along with that.” The main ideas are generally understandable, but some errors in sentence construction, articles, agreement, and punctuation reduce accuracy. For example, the opening sentence lacks a clear grammatical structure (“Two pictures demonstrating … and other is…”), while “two door have been installed” has a number-agreement error. In “the cafe has kitchen in same place as it was before,” articles are missing, and several sentences run together through comma splices or overly long coordination. Aim for complete, controlled sentences, check singular and plural forms, and use full stops to separate distinct changes. More accurate control of these patterns would strengthen the range you are already attempting.

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