Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two plans of a college cafe give information about its renovation before and after.

Overall, both plans provide information for college students dinning, while the new version has more space, area for activities.

The old plan contain kitchen at front, which remains the same in the new plan. The serving area for all food and drinks designted within the Kitchen. The older version had a staff dining rooms, and large area was allocated for inside setting. The waste goods area was smaller adjacent to the restroom. The new plan of the college has profound changes, specially outside the college. The new plan contains Kitchen, and a salad bar added to the plan. The large area has been reserved for those who wants to dine in. Outside the college, a new place for barbecue engulfed, and vast area has been allocated for outside setting.

Comparatively, the new plan has more space for waste products than the older one. Staff dining room has been replaced with two other spaces: one is located for coffee bar, and one is to serve take away.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main change clearly: the former staff dining rooms become a takeaway area and coffee bar, while the kitchen remains. You also note the new salad bar, barbecue and outdoor seating, so the response covers several important features and gives an overall comparison. This is consistent with a response that addresses the task, though not all features are reported equally fully. Some descriptions are unclear or imprecise: “the serving area … within the Kitchen” does not accurately distinguish the counter from the kitchen, and “more space for waste products” overstates the change from a bin to recycling bins. The overview that the new version has “more space” is also broad. To strengthen the report, describe the new southern doors and outdoor tables, and compare the unchanged toilets and central seating area explicitly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph describing the plans, and a final comparison. This gives the reader a general route through the information, and phrases such as “Overall” and “Comparatively” signal the purpose of sections. However, the progression within the main description is not consistently clear. The paragraph moves from the kitchen to seating, waste and then outdoor changes without a stable route around the plans, while the final paragraph repeats the staff-room change already mentioned. Some references, such as “the older version” and “the new plan,” are repetitive rather than helping connect details. Organise the body by location or by changes versus features that remain, and use clearer links between related comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “allocated,” “replaced,” “adjacent,” and “Comparatively.” These choices show an attempt to go beyond basic labels. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, which sometimes makes the intended meaning less clear: “dinning,” “inside setting,” “waste goods area,” and “engulfed” do not describe the features naturally. There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “designted” and “setting” where “seating” is intended. Aim for precise, conventional plan vocabulary rather than ambitious words that do not fit the context. For example, describe the outdoor area as “added” or “created,” and refer to “indoor seating” and “recycling bins.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “kitchen at front, which remains the same” and a contrast introduced by “while.” Meaning is generally recoverable, but grammatical control is uneven. Examples include “The old plan contain,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “a staff dining rooms,” where the article and plural noun conflict. “The new plan contains Kitchen” also needs an article, and “those who wants” has incorrect agreement. Some sentence structures are incomplete or awkward, particularly “a new place for barbecue engulfed.” Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and singular/plural forms, then revise sentences to ensure each has a clear, complete grammatical structure. More accurate control of these patterns would make the comparisons easier to follow.

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