Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The map give the information about colllge cafe befor and pracent looks

To begin with, in this map several stages firstly, kitchan was stablished in the canter of north sied Whereas , serving area was bult the cornaer of north west sied their was all kind of food and drinks. However, in the middel of area were two staff rooms for teachers and table and chairs for them.

However , there are many changes of cafe area .kitchan is the same and new fasalitis are add in this cafe. salad bar is bult in west corner gor students al wall as barbecue near the salad bar. forhermore there are many chairs for student in the outsied off cafe

overall, there are many new facilitisy are add in this cafe al wall as same are remiend same

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two plans as a before-and-after comparison and mention some relevant changes, including the kitchen remaining, a salad bar being added, and outdoor seating and a barbecue. However, the account is very incomplete: key changes such as the take-away food and coffee bar replacing the staff rooms, recycling bins replacing the bin, and new southern doors are omitted. Some locations are also inaccurate or unclear; the kitchen is in the north-west, not the centre, and the barbecue is south-west of the building, not near the salad bar. The overview, “many new facilities are add,” is too general to summarise the main pattern. The response is 136 words, below the required 150, which further limits the detail provided. Develop a clear overview and report the main changes accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: it begins with an introduction, describes the earlier plan, then turns to the current café and ends with an overall statement. This gives the reader some sense of a before-and-after comparison. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because several features are combined in unclear sentences, such as “in the middel of area were two staff rooms for teachers and table and chairs for them.” The repeated “However” does not show a clear contrast in both places, and “overall” introduces a conclusion that largely repeats the general claim about new facilities. Use one paragraph for the original layout and one for the changes, and connect each feature with clear location-based sequencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to describing plans, including “serving area,” “staff rooms,” “salad bar,” “barbecue,” and “outsi[e]d,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is basic and several spelling and word-choice errors make the description hard to understand, for example “colllge,” “pracent,” “kitchan,” “fasalitis,” and “remiend.” Some phrases are also imprecise: “many chairs for student in the outsied” does not clearly describe the outdoor seating area, and “all kind of food and drinks” is not an accurate label for the former serving area. Learn and check key plan vocabulary, and use precise terms such as “located,” “replaced,” and “outdoor seating” to describe changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences and use contrast, for example “However, there are many changes of cafe area,” but control is limited and errors occur throughout. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent in “The map give” and “new fasalitis are add”; past and present forms are also confused in the descriptions of the two plans. Articles and sentence construction are often missing or faulty, as in “kitchan was stablished in the canter” and “in the middel of area were two staff rooms.” Punctuation and spacing problems, including “However ,” and “area .kitchan,” add to the difficulty. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “while” or “whereas.”

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