Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given map illustrates the design of a college cafe before and after renovation.

Overall, the redesigned cafe is structured to be more organized, with addition of a barbecue site and a salad bar, along with a new outdoor seating facility. The staff dinning room has also been turned into take away and a coffee bar. Although it enhances the overall efficiency of the cafe, but it might make staff management comparatively harder.

The cafe before redesign composes of a kitchen, the serving area (of all meals and drinks),staff dinning rooms, a bin on the right and toilets on the left side of the entrance while the hall is filled with tables and chairs.

On the other hand, the renovated cafe contains seperate bar for the meals and salad. It has a new spot for 'take away' food and a seperate coffee area. The toilets remain the same however recycling bins are also bought. The outdoor space is turned into use by building a barbecue spot along with increasing seats availability for the customers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main transformation clearly: the former staff dining rooms become takeaway and coffee facilities, while a salad bar, barbecue and outdoor seating are added. You also note that the toilets remain and that the bin becomes recycling bins. These details support a relevant overview and cover the principal changes. However, some descriptions are inaccurate or too general: the toilets are in the bottom-right corner, not “on the left side of the entrance,” and the outdoor seating is newly added rather than an existing outdoor space simply put to use. The claim that the redesign improves efficiency but makes staff management harder is speculative and not shown by the plans. More precise location comparisons and a factual overview would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall shape: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the former and current layouts. The contrastive phrase “On the other hand” helps signal the move to the redesigned café, and the main changes are generally easy to follow. However, connections between details are sometimes mechanical, and the final paragraph lists features without a clear spatial progression. The sentence beginning “Although” is also awkwardly joined to “but,” which interrupts the flow. Organise each layout from one side of the plan to another, and use linking expressions to show specific changes rather than relying mainly on “before” and “on the other hand.” This would make the progression more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of task vocabulary, including “renovation,” “serving area,” “recycling bins,” and “outdoor seating,” and the reader can understand the main changes. There are, however, several inaccurate or awkward choices that limit precision: “seperate bar for the meals and salad” does not clearly distinguish the hot-meal counter from the salad bar, while “increasing seats availability” is an unnatural phrase. “The outdoor space is turned into use” is also an awkward collocation. Spelling errors such as “dinning,” “seperate,” and “bought” (where “brought” is intended) further reduce control. Aim for precise labels from the plan and natural collocations such as “additional seating” and “a barbecue area.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex structures, including the overview sentence beginning “Although” and the comparison “The toilets remain the same.” Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. “Although it enhances …, but it might…” incorrectly combines two contrasting conjunctions; use either “Although …, it might…” or “It enhances …, but it might…”. The phrase “the cafe … composes of” should be “the café … consists of,” and “the hall is filled” would be more accurate as “the hall was filled” when describing the former plan. There are also punctuation and spacing problems, such as the missing space after “drinks),”. More consistent tense control and cleaner sentence construction would improve accuracy.

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