Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

There are two particular graphs which indicates how the cafe looks before and after redesign. Some drastic change were seen in the visuals.

Stuff dining room were replaced by the take away food section and the coffe bar. A newly salad bar was added after the redesign of the cafe.

As for the outside sector a new barbecue theme was added in the outside section along with outdoor seating area. Some part were still unchanged like kitchen area. As we look into the serving area which were replaced by hot meals area. From the both graphs we can see some changes but not completly. By the new redesign the cafe has now a outdoor seating space which were absent in the first plan.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several important changes, including the replacement of the staff dining rooms with takeaway food and a coffee bar, the addition of a salad bar and outdoor seating, and the conversion of the serving area to hot meals. You also note that the kitchen remains. However, the response is only 123 words, below the required 150, and the overview is vague: “some changes but not completely” does not clearly summarise the main pattern. Several features are omitted, such as the recycling bins replacing the bin and the two new doors to the outdoor area. Develop the comparison more fully and describe the key changes precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has some basic organisation: it moves from changes inside the café to the outside area, and the ideas are generally relevant. However, there is no clear introductory overview beyond repeating the task wording, and the progression between details is sometimes abrupt. For example, “As for the outside sector” is followed by outdoor changes, then the response shifts back to the serving area and kitchen. Linking phrases such as “As we look into” and “From the both graphs” are awkward or unclear, while “Some part were still unchanged” does not connect smoothly to the examples that follow. Group the internal changes together, then describe the exterior, using clear comparisons and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing plans, including “replaced,” “added,” “kitchen area,” and “outdoor seating area,” so the main changes can be understood. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate: “graphs” is not suitable for plans, “Stuff dining room” should be “staff dining rooms,” and “barbecue theme” does not accurately describe a physical barbecue area. There are also spelling errors such as “coffe” and “completly,” and imprecise phrases such as “outside sector” and “some part.” Use precise plan vocabulary such as “section,” “facility,” “remained,” and “was converted into,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including “Some part were still unchanged like kitchen area” and “As we look into the serving area which were replaced by hot meals area.” However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include subject–verb disagreement in “two particular graphs which indicates” and “Some drastic change were seen,” incorrect articles in “a outdoor seating space,” and faulty relative clauses such as “which were replaced.” Plural forms and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise accurate past-tense descriptions of changes, checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and singular/plural nouns before adding longer clauses.

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