Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There are many significant changes happened after the cafe was redesigned, so, i will take a approach where at first i will list all the new changes that came after redesiging the cafe such as new salad bar around the corner of the cafe and the new design kept tables and chairs inside the cafe and they also added an outdoor seating arrangement for extra customers or for the customers who wants their surrounding to be environment friendly. The staff dining rooms area has been replaced by take away food and coffee bar. The previous serving area(all foods and drink) was also replaced and now they have kept hot meal section there to store some delicious hot meals. Location of toilets remain unchanged and the new design has a barbecue section located just outside the cafe. New design unlocks many new potentials for the cafe like now more people can be entertained and fed as we now have an outdoor seating arrangment. The all new barbecue section can be considered cherry on the top.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes accurately: the staff dining rooms become a takeaway-food area and coffee bar, the serving counter becomes a hot-meals section, the toilets stay in place, and outdoor seating and a barbecue are added. This gives the reader a relevant account of the redesign. However, the response does not clearly organise these details around an overview of the main changes, and some points are imprecise: the salad bar is along the western wall, not simply “around the corner,” and the new seating is not described as being for environmentally friendly surroundings in the plan. The eastern recycling bins are also omitted. Focus on observable layout changes and explain the most significant additions and retained features more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response contains a generally understandable sequence, moving from new facilities to replaced areas and then to features that remain or have been added. Linking phrases such as “The staff dining rooms area has been replaced” and “Location of toilets remain unchanged” help connect comparisons. However, the whole answer is presented as one long paragraph, and the opening sentence announces a plan to list changes rather than providing a clear overview. Several ideas are joined into an overloaded sentence with repeated “and,” making relationships between details harder to follow. The final comments about “new potentials” and the barbecue being “cherry on the top” interrupt the factual progression. Use a brief overview followed by logically grouped details, with clearer sentence boundaries and less mechanical linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “redesigned,” “replaced,” “outdoor seating,” “serving area,” and “barbecue,” so the main changes are usually understandable. There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “significant changes” and “potentials.” However, some choices are imprecise or too informal for an objective report: “cherry on the top” is conversational, while “unlock many new potentials” is an awkward collocation. “Around the corner” does not precisely locate the salad bar, and “environment friendly” adds an unsupported interpretation. Spelling errors such as “redesiging” and “arrangment” also reduce accuracy. Prefer precise location terms and neutral language that describes what the plan shows.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses linked with “so,” “where,” and “who,” and the reader can generally understand the intended meaning. Some grammatical errors remain, however. The opening has faulty structure in “There are many significant changes happened,” and “i will take a approach” has errors in capitalization and article use. In “the customers who wants,” the verb does not agree with its plural subject; “Location of toilets remain unchanged” also has agreement and article problems. Long sentences joined by several instances of “and” make punctuation and clause boundaries difficult to control. Aim for shorter, complete sentences and check articles, subject–verb agreement, and capitalization while retaining some complex structures.

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