Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pictures compares the renovation of an university cafe, making it modern and up to date.

Overall, the cafe previously had fewer departments and many new and useful things are added to it after renovation. Similarly the space is efficiently occupied after the redesign.

If we compare both, we see that there was mainly one kitchen area and serving area for all kinds of food and drinks. However, it was replaced by a hot meal section after the renovation. An outdoor sitting area is also a remarkable change which was not present before. On the left side a barbeque section is also a new thing. The staff dining room was modified by replacing it with take away food section and a coffee bar. In addition to that, a salad bar is also made in the indoor settings of the cafe. The recycle bins havetaken the place of normal simole bins and the toilets remain in the same area as it was before.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation clearly: the former general serving counter becomes a hot-meals section, the staff dining rooms are replaced by takeaway and coffee facilities, and outdoor seating with a barbecue is added. You also correctly note the salad bar, recycling bins and unchanged toilets. This gives the report a relevant overview and covers most key changes. To make the account more complete and precise, include the retained central tables and chairs and explain that the kitchen remains in the same position. The overview claim that the space is “efficiently occupied” is not clearly demonstrated by the plans, and “many new and useful things” is too general. More specific comparisons would strengthen the report’s coverage and development.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, an overview and a paragraph describing changes. Its ideas are generally understandable, and linking phrases such as “However” and “In addition to that” help show relationships. However, the progression within the final paragraph is somewhat list-like, moving between indoor and outdoor features without a clear organising pattern. “If we compare both” is a vague transition, while “Similarly” does not clearly connect the overview’s two claims. Group the changes by location—for example, north and west interior changes, then the southern outdoor additions—and use clear references such as “the former staff rooms” to make the comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a redesigned café, including “renovation,” “serving area,” “outdoor sitting area,” “salad bar” and “recycle bins.” Some attempts at more specific language are useful, but several choices are imprecise or informal for a plan description: “new and useful things,” “a new thing,” and “normal simole bins” do not describe the features accurately or naturally. “Barbeque section” is understandable, though “barbecue area” matches the plan more closely. There are also spelling and word-form slips, including “havetaken” and “simole.” Aim for precise labels from the plan and use neutral terms such as “facility,” “feature” and “replaced by” rather than conversational wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including contrast with “However” and a relative clause in “which was not present before.” Most of the meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors recur. The opening should be “The pictures compare,” not “The pictures compares,” and “a university café” needs the correct article. In “many new and useful things are added to it after renovation,” the tense and passive construction are awkward; use “were added during the renovation.” The final clause, “the toilets remain in the same area as it was before,” has a subject–pronoun mismatch and would read more accurately as “the toilets remain in the same area as before.” Check agreement, articles and tense consistency when revising.

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